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May 6


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Smiling through your pain,
Till the wounds stop bleeding.
Running through your clouds
Once the sky stops raining.
Never saying never,
Going faster, stronger, better
Even when the
Raindrops seem to fall down forever.

Till the birds start to sing, and
Happiness overwhelms you,
And a smile takes over your face
Now and eternally.

Surviving through the pain,
Until the wounds stopped bleeding.
It never seemed it would end,
Crying, screaming, dying...
Indeed it did, it
Died away..
Even when the raindrops would never end.
Read the first letter of each line.

You are stronger than suicide. <3

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If it was just a tad more rounded syllable wise, it would be perfect! I do like it
very much though. I can really see the healing part of your soul showing as the words flow with feeling. That is always a very very good thing. The whole idea of being positive and than in the end you show the uplifted nature you held so long as pouring out with a bit of relief, this is saying and showing too me, you are finally coming to peace within yourself and what I mean by saying this you have started to accept what has hurt you inside so deeply leaving a scar on something you'll never forget but You've also become a stronger person noticing time has slowly started healing your broken heart.
Thanks 4 sharing this with us. :)
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seashore-aurora Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
I have done a pic, I'm sorry if you are offended, I hope you like it! I must be bad to have no comment s or watchers, should I take them off?
seashore-aurora Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
I have done a pic if you are offended, I'm sorry, I hope you like it! I must be bad not to get any comments or watchers should I take it off?
Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i didn't even realize the first letters together were something ! It was strong enough without that anywho very nice poem : )
koreauchiha Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
mack0312 Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the first letters <3
evettejo Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the first letter thing. And you did well with the poem as a whole.
AlvanGrand Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Student Writer
Like this one too. going to keep reading your stuffs
racerman56 Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Love it, so well written :heart:
ddog101rocks Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
.....I have no words.
SoraLove Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Love what you did with the first letters! :D :heart: Stay amazing!!!
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