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Smiling through your pain,
Till the wounds stop bleeding.
Running through your clouds
Once the sky stops raining.
Never saying never,
Going faster, stronger, better
Even when the
Raindrops seem to fall down forever.

Till the birds start to sing, and
Happiness overwhelms you,
And a smile takes over your face
Now and eternally.

Surviving through the pain,
Until the wounds stopped bleeding.
It never seemed it would end,
Crying, screaming, dying...
Indeed it did, it
Died away..
Even when the raindrops would never end.
Read the first letter of each line.

You are stronger than suicide. <3

Note me if you're ever having a problem, even if i can't help, i'm here to listen. 
Love you all!

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If it was just a tad more rounded syllable wise, it would be perfect! I do like it
very much though. I can really see the healing part of your soul showing as the words flow with feeling. That is always a very very good thing. The whole idea of being positive and than in the end you show the uplifted nature you held so long as pouring out with a bit of relief, this is saying and showing too me, you are finally coming to peace within yourself and what I mean by saying this ..is you have started to accept what has hurt you inside so deeply leaving a scar on something you'll never forget but You've also become a stronger person noticing time has slowly started healing your broken heart.
Thanks 4 sharing this with us. :)
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seashore-aurora Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
I have done a pic, I'm sorry if you are offended, I hope you like it! I must be bad to have no comment s or watchers, should I take them off?
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seashore-aurora Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
I have done a pic if you are offended, I'm sorry, I hope you like it! I must be bad not to get any comments or watchers should I take it off?
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i didn't even realize the first letters together were something ! It was strong enough without that anywho very nice poem : )
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koreauchiha Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
Beautiful.
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mack0312 Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the first letters <3
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evettejo Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the first letter thing. And you did well with the poem as a whole.
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AlvanGrand Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Student Writer
Like this one too. going to keep reading your stuffs
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racerman56 Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Love it, so well written :heart:
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ddog101rocks Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
.....I have no words.
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SoraLove Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Love what you did with the first letters! :D :heart: Stay amazing!!!
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shipallthecharacters Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This made my night. Thank you so much for writing this. :)
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IamaCutie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Man, I almost started crying when I read the message. 

Everyone needs to see this.

It reminds me of my favorite quote: "Everything will be alright in the end. If it's isn't alright, it isn't the end".
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Mewn-san Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
this is just beautiful... I have no words ;;
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
It's an acostic poem. Nice. And it carries a powerful message :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner May 8, 2014
You're welcome :)
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Kokobutter Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're an amazing writer.
This helped, thanks ouo
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:iconmikkimarie:
MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you so much <3 I'm glad :)
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Kokobutter Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^u^
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xDarkShadows Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're An Amazing Writer!
This Helped. Thank You! <33
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much :) 
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xDarkShadows Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're so welcome!
I'd say thank you to you, you've saved and helped so many people, including me, thank you. :D
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zarexraze Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
OH MY GLOOOBBBBB!!!!!!!!!!!!

THIS IS GENIUS!!!!!!!!!

Well done, MikkiMarie.

You know, as soon as I has some FREE TIME, I wanted to write a few poems. I am honestly inspired by you.
YOU AND YOUR WORDS ARE AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww! thank you so much! that means a lot to me :)
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zarexraze Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:
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AerithEchidna4rt Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh wow <3 I didn't even noticed until I saw Read the first letter of each line. Amazing <3
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) thanks!
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AerithEchidna4rt Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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OreoQueen01 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: Crying over here :crying: 
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw don't cry! D:
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OreoQueen01 Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
But it's so touching :c You are amazing :)
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Sweetly-Demonic Featured By Owner May 6, 2014
Thanks, I needed that <'3 :hug:  
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) you're very much welcome.
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syinthetic Featured By Owner May 6, 2014
just reminded me of
'Suicide isn't cowardly. I'll tell you what is cowardly: treating people so badly that they want to end their lives'

you write it wonderful :D
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! I love that quote :)
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Diomedeez Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for this! I love it! :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! <3
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BreeBree135 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing. :clap:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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BreeBree135 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: No problem!
I love how good it flows,
especially being an acronym-type of poem.
Meaningful. :heart:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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BreeBree135 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!! :heart:
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moe-chii Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is...just...arghhhh! Its so mind-blowing how perfect this poem, no, masterpiece is. It's also interesting how your "Stronger Than Suicide" poem was what first introduced me to you. All I can say is, Thank you.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks so much <3 that's so sweet :)
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AnimewolfRPC Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I needed this right now. Thank you. ;n; <3
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :)
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AnimewolfRPC Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You phrased perfectly as well. Very heart-swelling~ Nice job! ^^ Heart - Free 
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