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Stop hating her for the littlest things.
The things she can't prevent,
The things she can't save herself from..

Stop demanding her to do things,
Things she can't accomplish,
Things she can't imagine being done...

Stop lying to her,
Telling her you love her,
Want her, need her...
When all you've ever done is make her want to
Die.

Stop hating her for the littlest things.
The things she can't prevent,
The things she can't save herself from...

Because,
When those little things you've done
Take her down...
The little things won't matter anymore.
Does this need a description? ... nahh i don't think so.
All i want to say is that I apologize if it stinks.
I wrote this as quickly as i can type -.-
Didn't go over it. I'm sorry D:

Love you all. Stay strong <3
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This was very very well written. i think there were a few cinks but over all i loved it ^^
Very nice job. i hope to see more stuff like this on deviant art it sends a good message out to everyone.
i would figure it would have taken some time to get the words all together and nice as you did and i hope you plan on doing more like it.
it impacts ME alot due to personal issues.
the title drew me to it though, so a good title can go a long ways.
i am very impressed. good job
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ohmygoskjackfrost Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i really like ur poems!
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i love how you always finish with a really bold statement one that makes the whole poem come together :) amaazing.
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evettejo Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very good at making your poems about the same things.. yet having all your poems be remarkably different. Bravo. :icondeathstareplz:
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reba2014 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
This poem describes what some people are going through everyday and it is beautiful when put into a poem. Bravo ;)
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reba2014 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
That was great:):):)
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Theoddshipper Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013
Heh... I think this one sort of suits me, your a very good writer.
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like this sometimes, b/c someone I love more than anything in the world has a bad habit of speaking what she calls "truth". I call it criticisms. Thank you for writing this... I feel a little less alone.
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Bytebullet Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Another great one. Your work continuously impresses me!
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UmbriLovesEspi Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful...I know a lot of people, including myself, can relate to both the girl being tormented, and the one watching from the other side, unable to help.
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AngelfearUchiha Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
This poem is like me.... They hurt me everyday.
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SgtSkittle Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love it
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Inverted-Shadows Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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brokenwhistle Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Stay strong to you also! It's always good to look at the whole picture and not get so involved it the petty things in life. Remember, YOU are a beautiful person and have something to contribute to this world. Stay creative and "Make Gifts Not War". Imagine!
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k1ttykat91 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the last line! :D :heart:
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Frollopocalypse Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student General Artist
This sums up my life right now.
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Astro-Creep166 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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Midn1ghtcat Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
very nice
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tiffcindo Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
beautiful. thank you. As I read it, it became even more powerful bc i was listening to www.youtube.com/watch?v=5mJ08-… which is performed by the piano guys.
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THEHEARTSREASON Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student General Artist
It doesn't stink at all. LOVE IT! It has the sort of feel to it. 
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anila73 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANK
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The little things matter more than they should. :(
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Kokobutter Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautiful.
It didn't suck at all.
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Postaff Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is beautiful! Great work! :D
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AmbitiousAuthor Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It doesn't stink at all.  This is beautiful and so very true!
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carbonatedgirl Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It doesn't stink. It's beautiful. From the heart. I love it. :heart:
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Taiwann15 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Very beautiful XD 
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
a very good poem.
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MichieXStrawberry Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is really good. love it
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Basic human relations should be taught at school instead of countless useless things. Our brain shouldn´t be locked in an evil configuration.
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MarioGamer96 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Writer
I like this alot <3
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SSJCyberSonic Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I like this. We need more understanding in this world.
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TheSpitfireSpirit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is how I feel a lot of the time
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MAziMadi1234 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
why aren't you on facebook O_O
OH and this is a good poem C:
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Facebook is a time vampire.
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TheNewLeyany8 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
This is very beautiful and true! Great words!
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