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My legs are covered in bruises
And I have a scar by my left eye.
I’m not allowed to smile, though
And I’m not allowed to cry.

I think my right arm’s broken
But shh, don’t tell my dad.
He doesn’t like to worry bout me
When he’s already mad.

I have a burn on my left wrist
From when he pushed my arm
Against the stove, the hot, hot stove
And did a bit of harm.

I have a bear, a teddy bear.
He doesn’t have a name.
He makes me better every time
I’m feeling hurt and shame.

Today, my dad came home kind of late
A beer still in his hand.
I closed my eyes and waited.
He screamed, he shouted, and…

Well, my name is Mary Starr
And this is how I died.
But daddy always loved me.
And daddy always lied.
Speaks for itself.
Just a thought in my head, thought I'd write it down...
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This is a brilliant piece of work. As a social work student, it breaks my heart to read it, and I teared up because of the reality of the poem. You should be proud of this art because it brings to life the heartache a child can go through when they are being abused. You bring up the emotions and thoughts of someone that gets forgotten in real life. The children who are victims really suffer emotionally from the abuse, and I don't think we always think about how the emotional abuse is just as bad as psychical abuse. Brilliant work!
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Wow. Just wow. You're amazing, you know. This is amazing. I can imagine the scene perfectly, the poor little child and the drunken father. The way your words fall of the page (screen) impact so many people out there, so many people who have gone through something similar. It was as if I were living the life of that child through that child's eyes; the brilliance of it all is amazingly captivating in itself. Thank you so much for writing this. This really means a lot to many people, and it means a lot to me. Mary didn't deserve to die, but sometimes that's how things work. A father comes home too late, he's been out too long, and doesn't want to face it. He loses his control until...and blackness is all the child can see. Thank you.
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ProjectAnimation Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Oh my gosh... this is stunning. Absolutely incredible. clap remake 1a 
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kylebjart Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great poem, been there so certainly pulled a few heart strings! Thank you for sharing.
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Akire123 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this made me cry a bit
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xXBlackRoseWolfXx Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The last part was rather weird tome only because my art teachers name is Mary Starnicky O-O
But keep up the great work :D
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whatifguyplz Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
wow i'm so sorry i called you a dirt bag you have every right to be mad at your father. But for real you need to call child services right now. Don't do anything crazy
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No... this isn't true. Don't worry. :)
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whatifguyplz Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
he reads the comments doesn't he
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol he doesn't even know I have this account XD he's actually sick right now, sadly. The majority of my poems are stories, fiction stories. Unless i say otherwise.
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whatifguyplz Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
ok i'm just saying if there's anything you need to say you should tell someone that's all
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DruidCentaur Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Did your father abuse you and your mum a lot because a few of your poems are to do with abuse from a father?
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Nuzlock Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
I just cried a little, hate my dad so much. Thanks for writing the way you do
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EziotheAssassin Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
This hits home to me, I delt with an abusive stepfather for six years. Luckily he had an affiar and my mom broke it off and now we are free of that curse. Apparently she never had good taste since my real father was the same way.
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EdisCole17 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
You are such a good writer. <Love it
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kenntara833 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Are you planning on becoming a writer or a poet? because i already fav'd two of your pieces because they are so good. Keep writing, you have a gift!
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Silver-Wolf28 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hauntingly beautiful.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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TheGothicSongbird Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Writer
I love how well this poem flows, easily read aloud.
The concept was interesting as well; amazing job.
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MegzLuvsYouAll Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
wow. Simply breathetaking. This poem did bring me to tears, thinking there are little kids who go through this. I love the poem. Sad, but beautiful.
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FeetOnFire Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wauw, this was breathetaking.
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BluRequiem Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And absolutely amazing poem that has emotion that comes out in every line~
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Javashot Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
I agree, this is wonderful
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authorofthings Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
this is really cool, really great
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just wow. It broke my heart reading it. I think many people including me can relete to this in some way.rrereally liklike the 4th stanza, it also flows very nicely. Best piece I read in awhile.
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn... That was good. I like the whole thing, but those last two lines really did it for me. This is an amazing (and enraging and quite depressing) piece.
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baran700 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
sweet
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Caro-Kitty Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the emotion in this piece. It is so moving. Very well written.
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nora038 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Student Interface Designer
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001glaceonice001 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Student Artist
Oh my god, that was brilliant! Fucking awesome! Kind of sad...but still good!
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shad0wclown Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW that's really impressive.
It made my heart sink. To know that this does exist in our world it's really sad. I have to kids of my own and I love them very very much. Please keep up the good work ;)
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NightTerrors Featured By Owner May 8, 2013
This is amazing. The ending really sends the whole story of the poem into the realm of reality in a wierd way. If I'm making any sense that is. I love it. Those last two lines are sooooo powerful in the most twisted way. You're very talented.
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AOnceSuicidalPoet Featured By Owner May 8, 2013
Would you be okay if I shared a link to this poem in my next journal? :)
it's so good!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! ^_^
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AOnceSuicidalPoet Featured By Owner May 8, 2013
Thank you! :)
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Cocolena Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome :D
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Yuuza Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
this is brilliant, i loved it :love::love:
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow... so sad
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know D: Thank you.
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful...sad...perfect:rose:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much <3
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are very welcome!:frail:
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crystalmirage156 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013
This poem is so beautiful and well written! You should make more. Even though it's sad, many people can relate to this. Excellent job. :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much <3
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AnimewolfRPC Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Mikki, is this another real-life based poem? :( If it is, I'm very sorry.
Mary Starr? Is Starr your last name or middle name? Because Starr is my middle name is spelled just like that. o.o
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No this is not real, thank goodness.
Starr is actually my sister's middle name. But it's not a true story.
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AnimewolfRPC Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh god, that's such a relief for me, I can't express it in words.
Meaning I have the same middle name of your sister! That's pretty cool.:3
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racerman56 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Very well written, brings to life the emotions of the abused, it is a sad story that no child should ever have to go through, pleased that it isn't true
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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Venegal Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Not to hate on poetry...but every damn time I read a poem in the front page it's about tragedy, death and sorrow. It's just too depressing.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, i'll try to write something happy :D
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DestroyErase Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This turns me on.
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