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You're fat.
Or maybe you're
Anorexic...
I don't know.
But you're not perfect.
And that's wrong.

You're ugly.
Or maybe you're
Fake...
But you're not perfect.
And that's wrong.

You're quiet.
Or maybe you're
Obnoxious...
But you're not perfect.
And that's wrong.

You're you.
Or maybe you're
like everybody else?
Well.
You're not perfect.

And that's wrong.
Just a poem I wrote really fast. I don't know.
But I know I know it's another stereotype poem, like my others. But before you say this is all I write, please recognize the fact that I do write other things, and just because they aren't popular doesn't mean they're not there.
Thank.
You.

Facebook! :) [link]
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This poem has touched me in a way that I will never be able to fully put into words. As someone who was constantly told I was never good enough, this poem, however simple it may be, is probably one of the most beautiful things I have ever read.

The message is simple: You're not perfect. No matter what you do, you are not perfect. And in the eyes of society, [i]That's Wrong.[/i] The saddest part about this is, it's true. Society has plagued our minds into thinking we have to be perfect, whether it be the right size, the right personality--it doesn't matter. you're not perfect and you never will be.

But that's the point, isn't it? Because NO ONE is perfect. And that is [i]perfect[/i].

I loved the way that this poem pointed out so many things in just a few short stanzas. It flows well, and is definatly worth taking a moment to look at, and maybe at the rest of their work.
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The first line caught my attention. I'm sure that was the point. It's a very effective opening. The piece has a nice rhythm, it flows well, and overall I think the simplicity of the style is a good choice for conveying your message.

I think the use of the ellipsis weakens those lines a little too much, but it's a minor problem. My punctuation choice there would've been a period or a comma, because I keep looking at the "..." and hearing the voice of the narrator trail off.

Really I think the main criticism I have is that your description essentially apologizes for the poem. If you have something to say as an author, I think you should say it and not worry about whether anyone else has a problem with your subject matter or how often you write about the same thing.
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
I love this! great work
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popcornflufferyz Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
I posted this on facebook. I hope you don't mind. I posted a link to your gallery, and told people to come check out all of your poems. This poem just touched me in so many ways, and I don't even think I could put it into words because I feel this pain everyday. Thank you for touching my heart. :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No I don't mind at all! :) I'm flattered.
thank you so much!
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popcornflufferyz Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
Of course! :) I just discovered you and I think your poems really tug at the heartstrings! I also read some of the comments, and I noticed a couple of people trying to tell you that you are an "attention-seeker". I want to tell you that they simply could have just walked away and stopped reading your poems if that was how they were going to be. I happen to enjoy the sort of angsty feeling I get from your poems. I think if it sounds good then post it. Don't worry about what others think, because you have your own style and that's all that counts. :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes! Thank you so much for the support! <3
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popcornflufferyz Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Anytime! :)
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ScorpianAkio Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very nice, if only other people would learn from this :)
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:iconsha-ani:
Sha-ani Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you know what? you're wrong.

;)
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zalterious Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
This says so much about society and the way people view themselves and others. I learned long ago that I wasn't perfect. I learned to like it. If I'm wrong, I don't want to be right.
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Dickywebster Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
People aren't very accepting of those who are different.
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PrimeKage Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Is it bad that this makes me think of this: [link]
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tk3030 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Nice! I like the meaning.
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SmartSong1 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it, and all it's true
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
I love this poem. Very beautifully written :)
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Sparky-Sumi Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The first few lines kinda drew me in.
It's a nice poem!
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Fingervante Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Really loved this poem
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Disgusting-Predation Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
in the second criteque it said that this touched the viewer in a way he/she couldn't put into words. I have a word for that! LOVE

anyways, this is a five-star rating! And it's funny!
:star: :star: :star: :star: :star:
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ARTnoob Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Professional Filmographer
Labels I get it.
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AliceReilly Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
ugh i hate labels soo much.
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dargo94 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Thats wrong.. sorry, xD had to do it. Great poem though!
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Maiyuna Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Interface Designer
I feel like I've seen several of these types of poems on the front page lately - so to me I don't think it's very original, and I'm getting rather tired reading about the same stereotypes. I like reading front page pieces, but when they all sound the same...it's much less enjoyable. (Forgive my 'ranting' - but I felt it needed to be said.)

However...the idea is still good, and I understood what you were trying to get across. Overall - pretty good job.~
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Shadow0B Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love this. Stereotypes really have to die, and not just the ones listed here.
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Memory-Of-Lakaeos Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
<3

just <3
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
This is really beautiful. You might have written it fast but trust me it has lasting effects.
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itshappybunny1234 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
[This is sadly true. Society is so harsh on us, thinking we have to be perfect, when really, none of us are or ever will be. We have to embrace the fact that our imperfections form part of who we all are.]
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artsyspirit Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful...carries a lot of meaning and feeling and truth :)
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InnocentLittleWolf Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know it's not, but so what if someone writes just one kind of poem? It's what they do, and if people didn't like them, they wouldn't be on the Daily Deviation page all the time now would they? Good job on this btw, it's a wonderful thing for anyone to read, and it holds a lot of meaning with me. Bravo! :D
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CountDrunku Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Very powerful words . . .
And you wrote it fast lol XD
Talent I say :)
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Ninjarocker909 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredibly thoughtful and very inspiring!! It's and incredible piece of work that applies to everyone!! Thanks so much for writing this!
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noodlenini Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I like this a lot ;.; It strikes a chord
I've been feeling pretty down recently, an this kind of sums it up
I love reading things with emotion in them like this that really get to the reader
well done :)
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ValosBlur Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Who am I???
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Farewell-Spring Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm sorry but I'm actually perfect so you're wrong. :)

Very simple but nice poem, I think a lot of people can relate to this. :nod:
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StickBrush Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Sadly, some people think like that.

My only answer to them.

You're human
I'm sure of that
And know what?
That's way more wrong.
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013   General Artist
:clap: :woohoo: :boogie: :w00t: :headbang: . . . 'nuff said.
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BaconMagic Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
There are thousands of poems like this :U
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Zombiesfan2012 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And there are thousands of stamps like yours :U
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes I know =P
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The-Leeward-Voyage Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very touching and beautifully versed!
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Falathiel-Valasilwen Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
anorexic people arent always skinny (◡‿◡✿)
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the-shiny-victini Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
ಠಿ_ಠ
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Sesshomarusama3 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
wow...seriously just...wow.
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sokkas-boomerang Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Well done, bro.
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Strange-1 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Professional General Artist
Really nice concept and well-written. I love the point you're making.
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meanderer89 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
*Goes into Nerd rant mode* Perfection does not exist in this universe, even Dr. Steven Hawking said so. If it did, all the atoms in the universe would be perfectly arranged in an order, in which all atoms have an equal gravitational pull on each other, resulting in none of them colliding into each other to form anything, and absolutely NOTHING being created. In short, imperfection = creation of life, the universe, and everything = NOT wrong. *End of Nerd rant* ....Sorry, just tired of this whole perfectionism idea. :(
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AriannaTheKeybearer Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice scientific view on in, I never knew that. o.o
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Melanie-sama Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Artist
Story of my life... and probably the root of my self esteem issues. =D
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CannedMadMan66 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Oh! And nice poem BTW, really catches everyone's life situation.
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CannedMadMan66 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Welcome to my hell. People demand so much of you when you're in school and have financial problems.
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snowfeatherr Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this poem, and I gotcha point to it. Beautifully writen
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ksj7700 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like this poem. When I read it, it sounded like you had put a lot of thought and time in it. I enjoyed it very much, although it is a little melancholy.
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