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She wants to cut the world away...
So she cuts her arm instead.
Simple little ..poem? O_o thanks for reading :)
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I enjoyed the short .....story? I don't know what to call it,but it speaks to how people who have,will,and feel like committing suicide.It is heart felt.If only someone would help those people.But you must remember not on,y girls commit suicide and are sucicidle but also boys,so don't forget about a he or him in any more sucicide poems.But your ....poem....maybe,still don't know what to call it, it quit unique.Not many writers talk about suicide and I would like to hear more,much much more.Good luck with future writes and best wishes to you,you wonderful writer you.yowo you only write once yolo :) <3
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depressed-angel26 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If only people knew… :'(
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HetaliaLover379 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Two small lines but with such powerful meaning! Well done.

This also helps me understand my friends, as sadly i have 2 friends who recently started cutting... Thankyou.
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, powerful. :heart:

Keep writing! :D
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LadiesWishMadness Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Professional Writer
You are very right, it hurts so we do it, people think it's stupid, I think its a away to scape
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emi-tweaks Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Student General Artist
wooww
short
but
so much emotion :'c
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Melodygirl74 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THATS ME!!!!!!!!! how can do that??! how can u sum up so many people with just 13 words and 4 periods?!
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Short poems can sometimes have the most impact.
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kirafaclaws22 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aah...its...its so true...
Thats pretty much my life story right there...
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CupcakeCarmen123 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
very nice.
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Sneeuwmaan Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Not to insult you but.. All these disease and disorder things and subjects, does anyone you know have these??? Bevause i think you are really strong if you can make such poems about them with such impact. Respect.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have Bipolar 1 with Psychotic Features, but otherwise no. =P Thank you!!
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
as someone who has dealt with this I find this very powerful
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HaruBells Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I had to read it like, three times, since it's so short, but so powerful.
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angellove94 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Writer
i cut myself :( But now it been 1 month
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angellove94 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Writer
:(
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MAziMadi1234 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
wow....it took me 1 hour just to read that.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
O_o
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MAziMadi1234 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
:D hehe
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REQUIEM-OF-INSANITY Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
To feel the subtle sting of this oh so short poem.....wicked!
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RobertoRococo Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
I rather like this couplet, even if it is a bit morbid.
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AriannaTheKeybearer Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
..... I found myself really engaged in this and if I have your permission I'd like to use this line to start a poem and possibly continue off it, if thats okay?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Please, please give me credit for those two lines though :)thanks!
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AriannaTheKeybearer Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I will do so! Thank you. ^.^
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shamanunderyahoshua Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
lol wow if you really cut your self you need help!
I don't care what kind of problems you have in life you don't hurt your self.
And for those who get off from doing this need to be locked up in a padded room!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I used to cut myself and I recently had a relapse but I will NEVER do it again.
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DorkyAmerikkalainen Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
You know, laughing at this person is not going to make them want to get help. If there is something going on with them, and people laugh and make fun of them, it's not going to make them want to tell someone that they are having this problem. Telling them they need to be locked up is just rude, and people like you make me sick. Yes, they could use help, but you don't have to tell them that way. The right way to do it is to be there for someone and try to help them. Not just laugh at them or yell at them. Seriously, grow up.

What I have to say to the writer is that I really appreciate your courage with writing this. It does explain a lot about how people are feeling in this situation. If you ever need to talk, or know someone who does, my door is always open. (Figuratively, not literally. That would kind of scare me if someone came walking through my door..) But really, people who put you down are so not worth your time. Stay strong <3
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shamanunderyahoshua Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I wasn't trying to put them down, and if you would of read it right I said the people who get off on cutting their selves need to be locked up and sorry know what the person is talking about before commenting!
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DorkyAmerikkalainen Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
Still, if they get off from it that's their own decision, not yours. You still don't tell people they need to be locked up in a padded room for their depression. No, what they need is friends and someone to be there for them and care for them. Someone to help them through this. and "lol wow if you really cut your self you need help!" doesn't come across as you're trying to help them. I know what the writer is talking about, and if I were her and read that, I would be very upset. It sucks to have people see your depression as "You need help" or even to the extreme of "You need to be locked up".
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shamanunderyahoshua Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Clearly if they are getting off on it they are crazy and I didn't say she needed to be locked up I simply said if some gets off on cutting their selves they do because there is a difference in depression and insanity I know I went the wrong way with what I said and I am sorry.
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DorkyAmerikkalainen Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
She never even said she was getting off on it, the poem was just saying that sometimes for people with depression that seems to be the only way out.

Thank you for apologizing, it is appreciated. Excuse me for snapping, but I really am getting tired of seeing people being put down for their depression, and that is what it seemed like you were doing.
Going through my own problems right now and for awhile now has made it hard to see it as anything but.
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shamanunderyahoshua Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I didn't say she was I was simply stating if people do, I have has friends and a ex in the past who that got off from cutting their selves then went from that to hurting others, I know about depression all to well I am dealing with it as we speak.
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kaoru-kitty368 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Student General Artist
i used to cut my arms. now i cut my ankles because after three years people started actually noticing XD

love it. so much said in two lines
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you<3
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Lexi247 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
Wow :O
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)
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Evalnia Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so true and so well defined, and only in two simple lines. I love it.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! <3
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Evalnia Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome :)
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AstroGirl123 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I...actually don't get it. Explain? :I
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's about a cutter. it's about how she cuts from depression.
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VelvetEclipse Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
..this describes me so well. I love your work :heart:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much <3
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