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Daddy, daddy! Come play with me.
I'll be the princess filled with glee.
You'll be the king, you'll reign over the sea.
Daddy, daddy, come play with me!

Daddy, daddy! Let's play a game
I'll grow up and like magic, i'll change
Into somebody so odd and so strange
Daddy, Daddy. Let's play a game.

Dad, hey dad! Let's do something fun.
I'll pull the trigger of this heavy gun
After I've given you some time to run
Dad, hey dad, let's have some fun.

Dad, come on now, can't you see?
This knife in your back and this bullet in your knee
It's who I've become, who I've grown to be.
Daddy, come on...
Come play with me.
About a girl who murders her father c:
Because I'm lovely.

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oliviavuo Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i really like this
to me the story says that when the child was younger she really wanted to play with her father
but the dad refused because he didn't want to and neglected the child
when she grew up she had no one to lead her in the right direction and she just killed him...
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Maiden-of-Wolves Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really want to sing this and put it up on YouTube for your enjoyment, Mikki... <3
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Surviveroflove Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
I like it how it turns playful to sinister. What is an idea is that maybe in between her saying daddy and dad maybe put a part in were he betrays her trust or something important. So when she grows up and kills him, she is saying it was his fault for her to turn out like this.
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kmiller104864 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
HOLY SHIT!!! THAT IS CREEPY!
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Celestine8 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013   Artisan Crafter
There's really no reason why she did it besides the often assumed 'creep factor' of the phrase 'play with me' in a sinister light. As soon as you hit the mood change, you just feel confused and wonder what you're missing and what could have been good, very creepy or insightful becomes cliche. If you wanted to do this better, you should have drawn it out and showed the change in their relationship. You could do it without the 'torture/abuse makes you evil' angle, too and have just continued with your main character being disturbed.
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SkullMuffins Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
My thoughts exactly. >_>
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Kennenth Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I do like it, but along with some of the other comments I think the mood change happened  a little fast. That may just be me though. c:

 

Otherwise it's very well written. I like it!

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Levymandias Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Starts out harmless and gradually becomes sinister until I realise whats going on...well done :)
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Kiri-Yuri Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
Very nicely done. I thought it might end badly when I first saw it but to have such an odd and strange thing happen to the girl's father and very well explained very well done.
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YokoSC Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
D:
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