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Daddy doesn't remember me.
Daddy doesn't remember Mommy.
Daddy doesn't remember his life.
He's stuck
In the year 1975,
Back when he was fifteen.
He still thinks his mom is alive.
He still thinks he's going to get beaten
For not being home.
And he still doesn't
Know himself.

Daddy doesn't remember me.
Daddy doesn't remember Mommy.
Daddy doesn't remember my sisters.
Daddy doesn't remember his life.
He's stuck
In his past.

And suddenly
He collapses.

"Daddy," I cry
Tears filling my eyes.
"Wake up!"

And after a while
After he lies there, lifeless
For over a half hour..

He wakes up.

"What happened?" He asks.

"Nothing Daddy."

Daddy didn't remember me.
Daddy didn't remember Mommy.
Daddy didn't remember my sisters.

But Daddy doesn't remember that.
About when my dad was sick. I was eight.
He would have episodes where he'd get stuck in his teenage years again. And then he would forget us.
But now he doesn't remember forgetting. He remembers being sick but he doesn't remember what happened.
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SquirrelMarination Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awhh!!!
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Maybe play around a little with lowercase letters at the beginning of some of your lines for the ones where you don't have periods at the ends of the previous lines, I think it might set an interesting tone... other than that, this is incredible! What was his sickness that caused this?
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SAMDisbored Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
That was beautiful.
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minkiefox Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
Oh dear... I'm so sorry.
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miseryofbrokenhearts Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This actually made my eyes tear up, and I am happy to know your father is doing better.
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Cwolf0615 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, that must have been awful. :O

Its a lovely poem though. :hug:
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IokoThePanda Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sad stor... but a really amaizing poem!
I love how in the end the meaning changed!
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puppiesareawesome123 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
That's so sad:'( The poem was wonderful though:)
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akkajess Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Student Writer
Hi! Your wonderful piece has been featured here [link] :heart::tighthug:
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luciapureheart Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
my grandfather passed away last august with Alzheimer's. he changed as a person...got very violent, didn't know anyone was around most of the time. He got angry about why he was hooked up to machines...he had no idea what was going on. He finally jerked out of his ivs and attacked the staff...he ended up dehydrating. We thought everything was fine up until he got violent...he lost who he was as a person, and lost who everyone around him was...but I choose not to think of him as being that person when I remember him. The good times always outweigh the bad, and having family with you, is usually what helps you get through moments like this. Keep smiling, and keep positive. Hold onto your love for each other and things will always be okay.
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ShadAlex1011 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Wow that's really sad and moving...
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xXCloudtail5Xx Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
So sad. But amazing writing. ;3;
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Cwolf0615 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
IKR?! ISN'T SHE AN AMAZING WRITER?! (Heh... I stalk you... :giggle:)
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xXCloudtail5Xx Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student General Artist
I feel awkward now. O.O
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Cwolf0615 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WHY?! BECAUSE I STALK YOU?! :XD:

I don't really... I just watch this girl cuz shes AWESOME!!!!! :eager:
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TimeturnerJasmy Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is pure. So deep.
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Ryuuto-Hakeshima Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
Oh my...moving poetry, sad story
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Totallywhelmed Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
This is impressive. I love it(though of course I'm sad that stuff like that happens. I don't mean that I love that your dad got sick. I just love your writing.).
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StephOCH Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
that is very deep and touching at the same time very sad
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Mini-Monny Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:( That's pretty sad and deep.
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DanDelAwesome Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
I scarcely ever see more in DA free verse than puerile whinging.
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talkaboutlmao101 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
a true work of art you have here
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TGPL Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Really sad and moving.
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CodfishJoe99 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow...very moving and very sad... :(
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Frankiefreshness44 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow that's so hard.
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AlleXaA Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
.... deep.
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777wolf Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
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KazahanaYukina Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh..this is quite sad but beautiful nonetheless...The way you wrote it gave readers an idea of what you actually felt. Thanks for sharing this one! =)
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dalyladolly Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It most be so hard
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kkatz Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. That must have been hard to go through.
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ritz216 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
wtf...
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NoNeedToAsk Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Photographer
Like my dad...Today and everyday =(
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KrayaSama Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist
I think it was wonderfully well written, I can't image living in that kind of situation but from what you said it seems it effected you to the core. I'm sorry I don't want to pry but what did he have and from what you were saying he doesn't have it anymore correct?
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ryanlothar Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
Wow, intense! Well written too.
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Peiridae Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow....very touching. What an emotional piece - and what a hard time that must've been for you to go through.
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ShadowLiepard Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
touching........
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Ari-Heart-Matsuri Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really...er, I'm not sure of the word.. er touching? Yeah, that :') Sorry for my bad english, I'm english.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha, thanks a ton :)
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Ari-Heart-Matsuri Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) It must be scary witnessing something like that?
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Shiki-J Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   Digital Artist
This was very touching.. -3- i liked this poem because my dad almost went thru the same thing. after he got a shot (needle) he couldn't remember anything. he thought he was in the past before i was born. and my older sister. He asked my mom "What happened to my house?" and he was talking about a house that was gone a long time ago.. he didn't even remember my mom. first thing he said to my mom was "Who are you?" and he kept forgetting what day it was...

good poem tho
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Makorra123 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
nice :)
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MapleKitty34 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm glad your dad is better . v .
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Stoneblueaura Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I can't even begin to imagine the kind of pain that must have put your family through. So glad he's better now. The poetry coming from the incident is sad, but beautiful. I love how you're channeling the experience into your art- to me that is the best method of healing.
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Partial-Credit Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I second that entirely!
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
amazing... I am astonished
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GopherGreg Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
He's okay now, right? Great poem!
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MangaArtFan Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Woah, that is deep. He's fine now right?
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MF99K Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
awww. My grandpa is staring to get dementia and sometimes my parents will cry and say that he will forget who we are soon. :(
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Oriole-of-Silver Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Photographer
Wow. That's really powerful.
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RiseRedMoon Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My friend's sister has severe epilepsy, and whenever a light gets shined into her eye (like a random reflection from a watch or a window or a torchlight) she collapses and has a seizure. Every now and then she'd wake up and have the mentality of a baby.

But having a father that can't remember you sometimes must have been awful :( I hope it wasn't too bad
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