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Dearest reader, please think twice before you try to speak
Words can be like knives that cause the victim to grow weak
Thoughts can be as bullets shooting freely through the sky
Injuring the innocent with every spoken lie

Please forget my laughter, please forget my broken heart
Please do not remember how you tore my life apart
Leave me as a memory that slowly fades to grey
Spend your days as usual, and I shall fade away

Listen to my cry for help, although it is too late
I've become the monster that you struggled to create
Trying to be perfect was a wonderful mistake…
Now I mustn't worry about which chance I will take.

Please erase all memory of who I tried to be
Please do not remember how I tried to be set free
Please do not be saddened under any circumstance …
What's makes now so different from when you still had a chance?
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breathinbreathout Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012   Writer
lurvee it
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank ya! :D
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
This is awesome!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!! :)
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turne1jn Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
love it
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sorashowfan13 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
Amazing :)
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Surrender-the-Rose Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
This was so amazing. I love "deep" stuff like this.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much ^.^
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EllerySan Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing! I get a very deep feeling from this poem. I love the way you used the knives as a symbol of pain, it added to the deep feeling the poem gives.
Great Job, I really liked it. I can't wait to see mmore of your work, therefore I will Watch you. :squee:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconyayzplz: DAZ SO COOL!
Thank you! :3

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EllerySan Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!

Do you think you would mind to look through some of my work and critique some of it? :flirty:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha of course :3
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EllerySan Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart:
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Monochrome-Kitten Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Very nice, the rhymes create a certain musical flow. I feel as if it could become a haunting, soft tune set tune in a minor key with a quiet piano instrumental.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Genius O_O
Thanks for the suggestion :) And thanks so much!
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Monochrome-Kitten Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
My pleasure. I love seeing pieces like this, they give me the sudden urge to play my piano for hours upon end.
Thank you for sharing! :thanks:
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LittleOvertures Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
This is simply beautiful. :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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LittleOvertures Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Welcome!
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Monkdey Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Beatiful rhymes, very well written, love the feeling of this poetry. This could make a great song lyric.
Excellent work, I like it!!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I write songs so i could try and make it into some song lyrics :)
Thank you!
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ThornZfire Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really well written. It flows beautifully. Great job!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!! ^.^
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ThornZfire Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome
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