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Liquid chains cling to my ankles
Feathers of a bird tickle my nose.
Haunted by the voices in this cold dark cell
Longing for the scent of a light pink rose.

Ocean waves beat upon a sandy shore
A sea of hatred and rage.
Dragonflies swim through air so light

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But this stuff never gets to the front page.
I was writing, and then I thought.. why write something like this, when nobody is gonna see it D:<
comments O_O please
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It's a really descriptive poem which is good, it helps readers to visualize what you are trying to say. I do think it could have had another stanza and it would have flowed better, like maybe another stanza after the dragon flies and between the line saying it doesn't reach the front page. Keep writing though :) and enjoy what you right because in the end all that really matters is that you yourself found your poem moving. So always strive to impress yourself by being better than you thought you could be or by writing something you didn't know you had inside of you.
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moonlightshines9467 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Beautiful, yet very descriptive. Not to mention...very well done! :D
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T-J-A-Y-E Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
true that :)
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Sneeuwmaan Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah, but these things really are front page worthy..
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is really beautiful. :heart:
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0Hobbes0 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this sounds beautiful, and the ending and description gave me a laugh. :dummy: It's wonderful!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you!!! :)
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0Hobbes0 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D
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candyzombielord Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
We will see it. Amazing work. it's very powerful poem.
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MaliceTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I just saw one of your poems on the front page. C:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oohhh yeay :3
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