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As I sit here cradling the blade in my hands
Treasuring the moments I wish that I had
I can't stop growing more lost and confused
I can't stop thinking... am I good enough for you?

As I sit here, wrapping the rope around my neck
No one will understand a meaning so complex
I simply can't stop thinking about it somehow
Thinking, am I good enough for you now?

As I sit here, pulling the trigger on the gun
I think, maybe I was never meant for "the one"...
And ...
Bam
goes the bullet.
For when I think it through...
I really won't ever be good enough for you.
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<3 Just a thought, just some words.
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:icondrunkant:
Words don't always have to be long-winded to carry significant weight; you demonstrated that exceptionally well, and this poem also addresses the highly sensitive topic in today's world of (teenage) suicide, which seem to be raising at alarming rates. Personally, this topic hits fairly close to home for myself because I experienced what it was like for someone whom I felt dearly for attempt suicide and I think that it hits home for many others for similar reasons, whether they're on a page similar to the narrator in this poem or on the other side looking in like myself. While I believe that the message is definitely there, I'm not sure how I feel about the overall originality of the concept of suicide, especially in today's world. Overall; well done!
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~Itachifan-girl 4 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
DrunkAnt I'm sorry to contradict you, but how is this not original. This has happened to her. It came from her own heart, and was placed on this "paper" (dont really know what to call a digital paper sweat drop ehehe) A writers words come from their heart, if it doesn't then that means its garbage. This work is not garbage it came from her heart and that is nothing to be critiqued. This poem was completely original. I am sorry for being so rash though. I mean you don't even know me and I am criticizing you, my deepest apologies. Mikki this is beautiful, keep up the good word
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~xXCarolineFirelilyXx May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very powerful. Love it.
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~omeow02 Apr 14, 2013  Student General Artist
+watcher!
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:iconmikkimarie:
Thanks soo much!
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~omeow02 Apr 26, 2013  Student General Artist
of course you deserve it congrats on the 500 watchers by the way!
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~deadhope4ever Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the sad truth really it is
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~ERaven77 Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
And I thought I had talent. I bow to you...
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:iconmikkimarie:
Haha, i'm sure you do :) thank you <3
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~ERaven77 Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hahaha. Good come back..
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~Contradictory55 Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
I want to cry, I want to reach out and save this person, I want what is already too late to have... this poem is amazing.
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