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As I sit here cradling the blade in my hands
Treasuring the moments I wish that I had
I can't stop growing more lost and confused
I can't stop thinking... am I good enough for you?

As I sit here, wrapping the rope around my neck
No one will understand a meaning so complex
I simply can't stop thinking about it somehow
Thinking, am I good enough for you now?

As I sit here, pulling the trigger on the gun
I think, maybe I was never meant for "the one"...
And ...
Bam
goes the bullet.
For when I think it through...
I really won't ever be good enough for you.
<3 Just a thought, just some words.
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Words don't always have to be long-winded to carry significant weight; you demonstrated that exceptionally well, and this poem also addresses the highly sensitive topic in today's world of (teenage) suicide, which seem to be raising at alarming rates. Personally, this topic hits fairly close to home for myself because I experienced what it was like for someone whom I felt dearly for attempt suicide and I think that it hits home for many others for similar reasons, whether they're on a page similar to the narrator in this poem or on the other side looking in like myself. While I believe that the message is definitely there, I'm not sure how I feel about the overall originality of the concept of suicide, especially in today's world. Overall; well done!
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IWubChoco94 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Where do you get your inspiration from?This is amazing.It sounds almost as good as Edgar Allan Poe!
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Fuck you bastereds... I'm way better then this...

Maybe this will get me some comments on my page

this poem is Garbage... it's worth nothing... worse then toilet paper, because it can cause Digital paper cuts.... and the screen would get all messy

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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
Gosh, just kill your self already, everyone got that your poetry sucks after the first suicide attempt.

I don't even have time to critique this boiled lump of pus... but heck what the hell, I'll do it anyway
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UncladSylph Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
I think it's ironic that while I was reading this, my shuffle started playing the Hoobastank song called Good Enough.
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Itachifan-girl Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
DrunkAnt I'm sorry to contradict you, but how is this not original. This has happened to her. It came from her own heart, and was placed on this "paper" (dont really know what to call a digital paper sweat drop ehehe) A writers words come from their heart, if it doesn't then that means its garbage. This work is not garbage it came from her heart and that is nothing to be critiqued. This poem was completely original. I am sorry for being so rash though. I mean you don't even know me and I am criticizing you, my deepest apologies. Mikki this is beautiful, keep up the good word
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Caro-Kitty Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very powerful. Love it.
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omeow02 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student General Artist
+watcher!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks soo much!
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omeow02 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Student General Artist
of course you deserve it congrats on the 500 watchers by the way!
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deadhope4ever Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the sad truth really it is
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
And I thought I had talent. I bow to you...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, i'm sure you do :) thank you <3
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hahaha. Good come back..
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
I want to cry, I want to reach out and save this person, I want what is already too late to have... this poem is amazing.
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sad, but beautiful nonetheless. :heart:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks dear :)
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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AstroGirl123 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's sad. I mite experience it some day but who knows when...I don't have a boyfreind yet. Great story. ;3
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks :D
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Beaglebub Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
You are good enough. Don't let anyone let you feel that you are beneath them, EVER. WHen someone truly loves you, they will love you just the way you are.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that's true, thank you :)
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izzy3301 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
wow that is so good!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks! :D
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ObliviousDoll Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel this for sure. This feeling sucks but..sometimes it really is true I think.

Great poem <3
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks love <3
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Reminds me of myself two years ago =/

Nice job. =)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw I'm sorry :(
Thank you <3
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't apologise! It just means you succeeded in making a connection to the reader! =D
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
This jumped out at me. Every word captures exactly how I feel right now.. in fact I am about to write a journal and feature it.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh goodness! ^_^ thank you! <3
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angellove94 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   Writer
aww!! :'( that really depressing <3 made me think about my suicidal thoughts
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sorry love :(
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angellove94 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   Writer
it ok <3 :huggle: i really love it <3 made me think how last month i was close being it </3
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Mightymay Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So sad... and yet so true. I love this.. Nice job :-)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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