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I love the little baby that I never got to hold
The baby that I never got to see.
And maybe, just maybe that baby would love us, too
If only that baby got to be.

I love the little baby that was never able to smile
Never even able to survive.
And maybe that baby would have a life worth living
If only that baby was alive.

And maybe that baby had mommy's blue eyes
And daddy's smile, and grandma's tight hugs.
And honestly, there's no way to describe that little baby
And no way to describe the way it was loved.
My mom had a miscarriage not too long ago. Thank you for reading. Comments? critiques? <3
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This is such a beautiful poem , I love the language in it . the poem has great Imagery in it. I have given this poem full stars in every field , because it deserves it . It is such a fine expression of raw emotion , probably the finest I have ever seen .

Anyone would be proud to call this poem theirs , and I feel proud just looking at it . It shocks me that such raw expression has gone practically unnoticed by alot of people . This poem deserves to be read over and over .I believe it to be a timeless classic . Amazing work :D
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A beautiful, yet sad poem. It brought tears to my eyes. I am sorry for you're loss, and hope you're family is well.

You did a very beautiful job writing this, many people can relate and share this grievous experience in life, and that's what made a big impact in you're poem. Situations like this always make a big impact on me, including you're technique and you're writing style, you really made the poem flow like water and hit its mark home in expressing and getting you're point across nice and clear.

Losing a child is always hard, I can't even begin to imagine. You expressed the pain and love in the poem beautifully, you made it sound and even feel as though the person reading it was the one who was feeling the emotion. At least that's the way it felt for me when reading your poem.
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
What I have to say would be extremely controversial and people would hate me for it so I'll just shut up.  
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The unborn are sometimes more loved than anyone else...
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Barrelracer4321 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This brings back memories. Baby Love. Though she never took her first breath, she was loved so much. Hence her name. I think this poem is perfect. Of course, I can't shop it to my mom. She'll cry. I cried. This is touching.
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EtaniaVII Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww...so sorry. But actually, I thought it was a great poem.
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JCLadeira Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student General Artist
As I'm sure you've noticed I've been poking around your gallery and I must say: I am not so easily moved. Yet almost each and every one of your written works touched me on the deepest emotional level that I have ever experienced. You truly have a wonderful gift with words.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh :) Thank you .. so much! This comment made my day.
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JCLadeira Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student General Artist
I speak only what I feel inside. :3
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ht166539 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So beautiful, heartfelt, sad, and gorgeous. It makes me think of when I was born and lost my sister I never got to meet. I feel for you.(Or your mom.)
It was a very beautiful poem.
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xXxAcidRainxX Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't want to offend you if you aren't religious, but you'll meet that baby someday in paradise and I am so very sorry you didn't before. I am sorry for your loss.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very religious :) hopefully i will <3 thank you!
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xXxAcidRainxX Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome:)
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angellove94 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013   Writer
im sorry for your loss dear:(i give you and your familiy my prays and hopefull you get to see your baby sister or brother in paradise <3
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terraluna5 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This truly is sad, yet uplifting as well. You display the dual emotions of love and grief. That is what gives this poem its power. I find it honorable that remember this unborn child with love and care. I shake your hand in friendship for this :handshake:

Only a person of unquestionable love would honor this soul unborn. Thank you for writing this.
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Hunter-Re Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My condolences. I can't even imagine what this must be like for you and your family.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you a ton. :)
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The-Mysterious-J Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Phew, I hope that never happens to me! Great poem, I love like the maybe-baby sounds. And it sounds more like love that like loss, somehow. I would even dare to call it nice, even though loosing a baby is definitely not nice. But it sounds comforting.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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The-Mysterious-J Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
welcome! :-)
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AvalonRose12 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i cried it is beautiful sorry for your lose
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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AvalonRose12 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome
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AvalonRose12 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
loss couldn't see key board
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MaliceTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You have such a beautiful way with words and I'm sorry about your loss.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much.
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MaliceTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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Iloveanime786 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
wow, this is such a sad poem, and the saddest thing about this is ... people have to live a life where this is true to them :(
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know :/ it really is a tragedy. thank you <3
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This poem stikes at my heart, my wife misscarried our first baby and even all these years later we still wonder what it would have been like.
Thank you for this, well written.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Im so sorry :(
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you, it was many years ago now but it never leaves you.
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MAziMadi1234 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
gosh hannah..dont make me cry...stupid onions
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, i love you mazi :)
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MAziMadi1234 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
k
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Pikatree1 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
;-; This is just too, how to explain... sweet.
Like I don't know how to explain, this is beautiful~
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
how sweet, and a nice rebuttal to those who feel that the life of the unborn lacks value and worth
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THEDORKYWEIRDO Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This was a great poem.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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xIntelligentxIdiotx Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
This is really sad D:
... but greatly written too
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What have I told you about cutting onions?! ;-;
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'M SORRY!
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retropacman Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh , I didn't see the description , oh my god I am so sorry ... If you need comfort , feel free to note me , I know that pain ...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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retropacman Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are very welcome
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MarioGamer96 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student Writer
Thats sad, I would feel aweful if i had a miscarriage
Great job with this :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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MarioGamer96 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student Writer
Your welcome :)
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DreamingLittleNeko Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Awh...that's really sad ;~;
this writing reflects exactly how most family members feel when that happens too, you did a good job describing the emotion felt.
I hope your mom and the rest of your family are ok/feel better soon
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