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I love the little baby that I never got to hold
The baby that I never got to see.
And maybe, just maybe that baby would love us, too
If only that baby got to be.

I love the little baby that was never able to smile
Never even able to survive.
And maybe that baby would have a life worth living
If only that baby was alive.

And maybe that baby had mommy's blue eyes
And daddy's smile, and grandma's tight hugs.
And honestly, there's no way to describe that little baby
And no way to describe the way it was loved.
My mom had a miscarriage not too long ago. Thank you for reading. Comments? critiques? <3
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This is such a beautiful poem , I love the language in it . the poem has great Imagery in it. I have given this poem full stars in every field , because it deserves it . It is such a fine expression of raw emotion , probably the finest I have ever seen .

Anyone would be proud to call this poem theirs , and I feel proud just looking at it . It shocks me that such raw expression has gone practically unnoticed by alot of people . This poem deserves to be read over and over .I believe it to be a timeless classic . Amazing work :D
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A beautiful, yet sad poem. It brought tears to my eyes. I am sorry for you're loss, and hope you're family is well.

You did a very beautiful job writing this, many people can relate and share this grievous experience in life, and that's what made a big impact in you're poem. Situations like this always make a big impact on me, including you're technique and you're writing style, you really made the poem flow like water and hit its mark home in expressing and getting you're point across nice and clear.

Losing a child is always hard, I can't even begin to imagine. You expressed the pain and love in the poem beautifully, you made it sound and even feel as though the person reading it was the one who was feeling the emotion. At least that's the way it felt for me when reading your poem.
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
What I have to say would be extremely controversial and people would hate me for it so I'll just shut up.  
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killerlord123 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
The unborn are sometimes more loved than anyone else...
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Barrelracer4321 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This brings back memories. Baby Love. Though she never took her first breath, she was loved so much. Hence her name. I think this poem is perfect. Of course, I can't shop it to my mom. She'll cry. I cried. This is touching.
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EtaniaVII Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww...so sorry. But actually, I thought it was a great poem.
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JCLadeira Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student General Artist
As I'm sure you've noticed I've been poking around your gallery and I must say: I am not so easily moved. Yet almost each and every one of your written works touched me on the deepest emotional level that I have ever experienced. You truly have a wonderful gift with words.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh :) Thank you .. so much! This comment made my day.
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JCLadeira Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student General Artist
I speak only what I feel inside. :3
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ht166539 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So beautiful, heartfelt, sad, and gorgeous. It makes me think of when I was born and lost my sister I never got to meet. I feel for you.(Or your mom.)
It was a very beautiful poem.
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xXxAcidRainxX Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't want to offend you if you aren't religious, but you'll meet that baby someday in paradise and I am so very sorry you didn't before. I am sorry for your loss.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very religious :) hopefully i will <3 thank you!
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