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I promise I’m not like everybody else.
I won’t
BREAK you.

I’m not here to
HURT you.
I’m not here to
RUIN everything.

I’m here to
FIX you.
I’m here to
SAVE you.
I’m here to
Make everything
BETTER,

Please don’t say I’m like everybody else.
Because I’m not here to
BREAK you.

But sometimes, gravity is
STRONGER
Than
ME.
Sometimes you’re going to
FALL.

But I promise, even if I’m not there…
I’ll still be there, for you.
The end.
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Tenshi-no-hane-Okami Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This sounds like something my friend would say
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Depart3d Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
but i'll be broken cause you didn't catch me.
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very nicely done..
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:icondude-im-alive:
dude-im-alive Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013   Writer
Very cool, I can imagine this being sung in a metal band like parkway drive or something
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sky-photographer Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
I like it very much, mostly because you can't always protect someone, as it says in the poem, sometimes you're going to fall...
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AnimePicasso Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Writer
love it ^.^ your a great artist mind looking at my poems and giving me some tips i am new at it and i would love if you told me what you think
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BlackSilhoutte Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm.. it is good..

In 2nd and 3rd stanzas ("I'm not here to hurt you" and "I'm here to fix you"), I suggest the word "to" must be in the 2nd line....

ex: I'm not here
to HURT you..
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dude-im-alive Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013   Writer
disagree
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racerman56 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Very nicely written...
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nice
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Itachifan-girl Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like this one. It shows that you want to protect this person.
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Koopakiy Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
I -love- your poetry so much, it really inspires me :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! <3
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AstroGirl123 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's a really good idea. You fall because of gravity, so it's not exactly some one elses fault. I get it. Nice work.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Too late. I'm already broken.
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
awwww... amazing as ever
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
np :D keep it up ^.^
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