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Hello darling.
I see you're hiding behind long sleeves.
I can see you trying to cover up your "ugly side" with gemstones and lace, with pretty clothes and make up.
But, hello darling.
You can show me.

Hello dear.
I see you're pushing away your dinner.
I can see you thrusting fingers down your throat into the sink, trying to hide your secret with laughter and smiles.
But, hello dear.
You can show me.

Hello honey.
I see you're hiding behind these precious things that the others care so much about.
I see you're upset with who you are, in fear that who you are might upset others.
I see you're broken, and I see, you're outspoken. You're lost and confused.
I see you're trying to hide something.
But, hello honey,
Hello dear,
Hello darling.
You can show me.

Because I don't care what they say about you.

I won't listen.
I was gonna call it "Hello sweetie"... but then....
Doctor who comments EVERYWHERE O_O

so...

Something i wrote really fast inside McDonalds XD Love you guys!! <3

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ohmygoskjackfrost Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ur poetry is so beautiful im almost to tears. keep it up!
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nikilia12345 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
amazing
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Darkdarling98 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist
Oh wow, this is amazing!
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CorinnaAngela Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
:}Pikachu want it  hello, MikkiMarie-darling! yey!You made my day again.
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RomanceFreak Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is such a BEAUTIFUL poem!!! :love: It really touches me!! Well done!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :D
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RomanceFreak Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome. :)
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dizxy55 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so good! I love it :) I like the way you wrote it. And its true
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Yoru-Sasayaki Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013   General Artist
Oh, I love this! It's so true! Everyone has something they hide, and this portrays that wonderfully. It would make an awesome song. :D
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If-Cloud-Was-A-Girl Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a really good piece.
Your imagery pushes past the "implied" and makes the reader sit up and see reality.
The "Hello darling" gives and ominous, almost creepy touch until the end, where you realise the narrator is the only one who truly cares.
I love it :)
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Well written, says so much about being a true friend
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imichaotheechidna Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist

Very tender. Makes me think of Mommy.

O///O Being consoled by Mommy anyway, not saying this to her

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thesunlight888888 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Writer
Awe inspiring!
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LalalandMuse Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Writer
I really, really like this! The tone is lovely and so is the message. :)
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ShiNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconclapplz: Very beautiful, very touching. :')
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ruff1298 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
Thank you.
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theplansimade Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
This is so beautiful. <3
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Alicelisabeth Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
Omgomgomg i feel like crying everytime i read the verse "because i don't care what they say about you"!!!! It's so damn cute!
I can't believe you just wrote it quick in the McDonalds, it's such... a masterpiece! Awesome work!
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Dj-Bunny12 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
I really like this. So cool!
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CalicoWingedCat Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is very, very good :)
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RegardsSirTroll Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love it. This is one of the best pieces of literature I have ever read.
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MaidenOfMalice666 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice, my friend. It was...tender. I think you might like my poems. My more recent writings are on disturbed1.com because my computer for some reason won't show me the box to write journal entries. If you're interested, here's a link that might work: www.disturbed1.com/user/77078/…

:) Keep on keeping on, okay?
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Artsylark98 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This just made my day!Woohooooo! 
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JullekEliseus Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
kind of confusing but in a good, romantic way
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MaidenOfMalice666 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How is it confusing? It's about pain: cutting and purging, the hurt that one grows inside themselves for the sake of sparing the emotion of others. I hope that helps a bit :)
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JullekEliseus Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh I got that part, I just kinda found it confusing. well maybe just the end a little bit. :shrug: and as said confusing good not confusing bad
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MaidenOfMalice666 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I wasn't criticizing, as I know I probably sound it: just trying to help  :)
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Claireluvs1D Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Go home, you're drunk...
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Ikaros-dream Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Beautiful :)
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comfortablynumb79 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
hermoso! :')
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student Writer
this makes me tear up its perfect
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Shinigami-senpai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very good.... it made me cry...
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Katori-93 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So beautiful<3
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IssyTheVampireQueen Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
I love it, this is beautiful. :3
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Angel-of-the-Lord Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
it's lovely. i'm glad you didn't call it "hello sweetie", or use it as the opening line. that seems too light for the weight of your work.

just one critique: stanza one *clothes
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Y-Usagi Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this ^^
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skaiblue Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:iconlainloveplz: HOW SWEET!
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Mandithefail Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
la in love All I can say is 2 things. 1.ITS BEAUTIFUL
and 2.Thank you so much for giving me reasons to life!You point out depression and the thing's if I did this or if I killed myself.Thank you alot!I know you helped others too!You're art is amazing!
catching love 
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BulbasarsXD Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013

This is very nice :clap:

 

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BulbasarsXD Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
I DONT CARE >:I
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Sanddune798 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is something I really needed to read, thank you very much. :)
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Mikisakiiro Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That was really sweet!
oh and I don't know if anyone's pointed this out already but on the third line you put colthes instead of clothes. ^^
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AskBlake Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Student Artist
{{ Nice catch.}}
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This really warmed my heart :)
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SmartAllecSquirrel Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Oh my gosh I fucking LOVE this <3
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TheSpitfireSpirit Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your description made me smile. I definitely would have had to make a Doctor Who comment XD
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YamiNoIcexIcuo Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh it made me teary eyed! Its so sweet!A tear... A happy tear 
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AerithEchidna4rt Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
xD I like where you came up with this, it's really good!

Doctor Who FTW!!! owo
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