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Slide the blade across your wrist.
Again.
Again.
Again.
Stop.
"Doesn't it hurt?"
I can't feel anything.
"A little."

Punch your own stomach.
Harder.
Harder.
Does it hurt yet?
Yes.
Keep going.
"Why do you do that?"
The pain makes me feel alive.
"I don't know."

Stare.
Cry.
Scream.
Stop.
Keep staring.
"What's wrong with you?"
I'm dead inside.
"Nothing."

"Emotional freak."
I'm just depressed.
"Sorry."

Stare at your arms.
Your stomach.
Your waist.
Your thighs.
"What are you doing?"
I'm ugly.
"Never mind."

"Attention seeker."
I just have low self esteem.
"I'm sorry."

Cuts.
Scars.
Tears.
Emotions.

"Emo."
"Scene girl."
"Psycho."

I'm just human.

I'm just me.
reposting an old poem of mine. posted it a while back and decided to do it again, this time with over 100 more watchers. :)
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When I started reading this, I had just loges on and it was the first thing there, it really intrigued me and so I clicked on it and it changed my impact on how I see others that are like this, and that it's jut who they are and because they express them selves, they end up getting hurt, from either themselves or others. This really is an amazing poem and it shoots to your brain to make you think, "hey, maybe that emo kid isn't as bad as we really think they are." And that's what I thought. I love this so much, you truly are talented with your words.
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(( This is an amazing poem, in my opinion. When I read it, I can tell that when you wrote this, actual feelings were put into it, you were actually feeling something. I love the way you wrote it, the dialogue and your own thoughts afterwards and then your answer to the question. That's how I am; I hide the way I feel with monotone, lies, and an even face. It really strikes me and makes me feel better that I'm not the only one who does that. I felt strange being the only one who told lies to hide the way I felt and still feel... I smile and pretend nothing's wrong, thank you for writing this amazing poem and keep up the great work! ))
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BurningFlameMC Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
:D
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CrustyNoodle Featured By Owner May 22, 2014
WRISTS ARE FOR BRACELETS NOT FOR CUTTING 
If you have depression or problem, seek for help or do something to distract yourself from cutting, like drawing, listening to songs, if all else fails... LOOK FOR REAL HELP LIKE PSYCHOLOGIST AND COUNSELLORS!!!
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MolotovGTM Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You have been featured here Link :rose:
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Mariaactually Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013
My biggest feat is for someone to see my scars, so I always cover them up until they grow back
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Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Twisted-Curiosity Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student
Wow. Strong.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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MAziMadi1234 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
omg i love this :0 :D
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)
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deadhope4ever Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
your a great poet I can feel the pain in this from my own experiences
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N1KK1-A Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
And in my humble opinion, I didn't see this as glorifying the act of cutting. I saw this more as recognizing the humanness in a person and truly noticing them for their suffering. I think most people are ignorant of their psychological world and this offers a glimpse inside. You are making that which is stigmatized, visible. And for that I commend you as well! :)
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N1KK1-A Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
I like the simplicity of this poem. The one-word sentences seem to be most appropriate and befitting for a topic of cutting. Cut. Stop. Cut. Stop. And I get the same sense of rhythm in the language. I also think the choosing of your words are powerful and convey the psychology and suffering of the act of cutting. And then at the end, despite the person's aloneness, you demonstrate how they are a unique individual with the same right to being included in humanity as with others. I love it!
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fangirlariffic Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this stuff is awesome. i dont care how many people have done it or whatever. your amazing
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww :) Thanks! <3
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Sbstrollerpadawan Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why so many haters?? Oh i get it now...
A while ago i read this and felt so, SO identified, i had to favorite it. I come back to this now and i see all this hate comments about this not being original, being poorly constructed, but i do understand it, i think even more than you do ._.
The feelings of a person with depression are so complicated and hard to explain -at least in my case- that they demand to be written as complicated and as hard to understand as this. I have to say that this doesn't reflect you being a person with depression, or emotional emptiness, but just a person with low self-esteem.
I want to be concrete now: You didn't mean to put a great thing there, mainly because (i'm pretty sure) you don't have a terrible life. You are not emotionally attached to it.
But i am. I do have that kind of life. I am like that.
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Tintinytdj Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
IT'S 100% WRONG
YOU IDENTIFY WITH WHAT YOU SAY YOU'RE NOT IDENTIFIABLE AS
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well that's nice =P thank you for the opinion <3
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Tintinytdj Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem~
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frogs-and-pigs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm afraid I'm on the side of most of the commenters; I don't think the poem is original or very impactful, it's been done a million times, etc. For a topic that holds a lot of emotion to many people (including you, I'm assuming), it really wasn't very emotional. To be honest, it was kind of stereotypical.

The other poems of yours that have reached the front page are, unfortunately, all very similar and not very original either. I'm sorry if that sounds harsh, but they just don't do it for me.

That being said, I'm not a poet, I'm not very good at writing my own poetry, so I can't really offer any tips for improvement other than use a richer vocabulary and make use of literary devices like metaphors and symbolism. In reading your responses to comments, I see that you're rather mature about taking feedback, and for that I commend you. It's rare to come across people so willing to improve on others' advice. So, good luck in your future writing endeavors :)
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frogs-and-pigs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much <3 i appreciate all critique, even if it's not always something i agree with.
Thank you! :)
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frogs-and-pigs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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LightingHousesOnFire Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Professional Writer
I guess i cant relate to you so that would make me more critical of the poem. And also just about every poem Ive read on DA has had something to do with self-harm/self pity so its desensitized me to it. However im not going to downplay depression... it sucks and it feels like there's no way out... Cutting is a coping mechanism and its not a very healthy one... my only problem with poems like these is that they never offer a solution... they kind of make cutting seem like the only logical solution and i think it might even cause someone to cut who might've never cut in the first place... maybe because they think its the "cool" thing to do or because they see others dealing with the same problems they face by doing that. that's all, im sorry for what you're going through and i really hope you are feeling better...:) keep writing, but just try to stay away from glorifying self harm...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh dear, i really didn't mean to glorify self harm :( I'm so sorry it came across that way.
Thank you for warning me. :)
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LovelyDreamer3192012 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
As someone who knows a lot on the subject... i like this poem... it describes it well. I know lots of people like this and I think this is dead on for a lot of it. I like the way you wrote this too. Its order is good, and my favorite parts are when the 2 people are talk'n including the real answer to each question. I love this, i wouldn't change a thing. I have one question though, why did you write this? (you don't need to answer it if you don't want to)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know why i wrote this... i just sorta wrote it =P
But thank you very much <3
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LovelyDreamer3192012 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)
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T0KIOHOT3l Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The poem is entitled "I am not a stereotype," and yet the entire poem is based around the stereotype of a mentally unstable person. I get what the poem is about, but it's so stereotypical that I honestly can't relate to it. Even as a self harmer, I cannot relate to the first verse. I also think that you should consider putting a trigger/content warning on this piece; It's a popular piece, it's on the 24hrs page, so a lot of people are going to see it. As a recovering self harmer, I know how triggering this kind of stuff can be.
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Junco9 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
I gotta agree with a lot of commenters. I get what you're saying but I feel like I see stuff like this online every day, it starts to feel really tired and, well, stereotypical after a while. I did like the flow, but I think you could have used more original words. I guess if writing it helped you, that's the most important thing, though.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3 i'll try to be more original next time :)
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yugijak Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I...kind of understand where your going with this, but the thing is, you don't really get it until you get to the end.

The idea, I think, is that the only real 'stereotype' that holds any value is that you're human.

Of course, I might be thinking to deeply on this. But still, just thought I'd lay that out there.
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miyakies Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
people can be so mean! I love your poem, it hits right where it should:heart:
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bluegirl2011 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You are a stereotype. And you're stupid.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I am stupid =P but I'm me! And i'm proud :)
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arjuu-na Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student General Artist
I can't say I've related to cutting, even though I did almost consider suicide through overdose - but we don't talk about that - but I do admire your response to most of the extremely rude comments here. Seriously. You're young and already so mature.

And also I'm a sucker for simple poetry so I really liked the flow of this. It sounds like a conversation, but one that the persona just keeps to himself or herself. You could always do with more, but keep up the good work!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) I just try to be respectful to everyone <3

And thank you! :) <3
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KeirTanaka Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I don't feel the same(or otherwise)connection this time as I did the last time!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
D: I'm.. sorry.
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KeirTanaka Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
No apologies necessary, it's your craft...not mine!
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Astro-Creep166 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconfeelsmemeplz:
I know the feels
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N1ghTw4lk3r666 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Artist
well i need an organic punching bag....how much do you take per hour?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you want to punch me? :D SWEET! 200 dollars a session, please. :)
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N1ghTw4lk3r666 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Artist
damn youre too expensive...how about 199,99..?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
200. This might be a deal breaker...
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N1ghTw4lk3r666 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student Artist
pfff shit i thought you were a guy...now ill have to search for another emo male punching bag along the net :/ i hope he'll be cheaper at least...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha.. nope, not a guy.
My apologies.
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N1ghTw4lk3r666 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student Artist
after a lot of consideration i have come to the conclusion of accepting your apology since its tough living as a member of the female population in this world. may the gods give you strength..
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks bro :')
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lindalandona Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is the most beautiful thing i read in a while
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank you :)
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