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I tried.
I tried to save you,
But you kept falling.
You wanted to crash.
But I tried.

I tried.
I tried to protect you
But you kept escaping the shelter.
You wanted the disaster.
But I tried.

I tried.
I tried to keep us together.
But you kept running.
You wanted to leave me.
But I tried.

I tried.
I tried to do everything to please you.
But you didn't accept it.
You didn't notice it.
You didn't appreciate it.
You didn't love me for it.
You didn't even care.
You wanted it your way, more than you wanted me.

But I tried.
What? I dunno.
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DarnArn Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
So often it is this way.. why? Nice Work
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ruebrooke Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
so true T_T
i love this! good work.
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TracyStromberg Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm speechless.
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Lily-Lily-L Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Student Writer
Wow. That's really amazing, you have a lot of talent! Keep on doing it :giggle: .
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:iconcookiemonster-chan:
Cookiemonster-chan Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You really are talented .
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:iconryka-the-fallen:
ryka-the-fallen Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
i could see him trying, and hated myself a little for being so selfish
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
This is amazing. Been there.

On this line you either forgot a period, or forgot to make the subsequent "But" lowercase: "I tried to protect you".
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:iconhoneywolfrin:
HoneyWolfRin Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
T.T this describes my life at the moment... I try SO HARD...
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:iconpinkyghuman:
pinkyghuman Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful. I feel the same way you do.
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:iconvampireblood222:
vampireblood222 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013
so true
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:iconlesmizlover:
LesMizLover Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013
Great!!
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:iconangelinacc:
angelinacc Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing. So simple, yet so touching. Bravo! :)
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:iconmusicgal913:
MusicGal913 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
O.o why do I get this so well.
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:iconsophie-stands-tall:
sophie-stands-tall Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
AWWW I LOVE THIS!!!
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:iconlaskiama:
Laskiama Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thatīs... amazing. For some reason it helped me to... stand up again. To try again. Always try. Thank you for that.
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PeAcEfUlPaNdA12599 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
this is totally beautiful.
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UnchartedGalaxies Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I feel like you've been stalking me for the past year. This is exactly what happened with me and my used-to-be friend. She was amazing at so many things and had a beautiful personality, but I always felt like what I did wasn't enough and she never appreciated anything. It always had to be her way, everyone had to have her opinion, and in her world she was always right. So I finally went up to her and told her how I felt, and that I can't be close to her anymore. I cut out the toxic one of the bunch, and now I'm much happier. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem!
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AloeVeraKill Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
At first I thought you were talking about a friendship. Now I think it's about a relationship.
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:iconjasenhansen:
JasenHansen Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
This was my life for the last few years. Well said.
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:iconmatarahi:
MataRahi Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student
Powerful in its simplicty :c
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:iconlanat35:
LanaT35 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
I really love this poem. :-)
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:iconfaery-books:
Faery-Books Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student Filmographer
I favorited -* ^ *-
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:icondeathbyselfhate:
DeathBySelfHate Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student General Artist
This is so good. I can really relate
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:iconpetitelilyrose:
petitelilyrose Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
its a piece many can relate to its very good
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lolathepunk Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I like this.
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Isalovesphotography Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
i suggested it for a daily deviation, it's a genius and touching piece...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thank you!! <3
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Isalovesphotography Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
welcome! you are genius! i am a writer myself but not on Deviantart. but you gave me much inspiration for my story again! definitely going to watch you now :)
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:iconxfascinatingfiresx:
xFascinatingfiresx Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Totally can relate.
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:iconlozzar1999:
Lozzar1999 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
That's very beautiful
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:iconcomicomi154:
ComiComi154 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist
I tried to loathe this work. But I failed to. :D Very nice.
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:iconnekodegomen:
nekodegomen Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow I jus-

This touched me so deep. That's all I can really say. Just beautiful.
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:iconsparkknight2:
SparkKnight2 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
the feels :')
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:iconmysterygirl98:
Mysterygirl98 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Sounds like something a mother would say to her daughter about dating
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:iconowltoons:
Owltoons Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Eridan and Feferi anyone?
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:iconshiandu-nikune:
Shiandu-Nikune Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful.
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stonecathetle Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful
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Forte-Teppo Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'mma be honest. This is nice, but I kinda feel like it could have a darker meaning. In the prospective of the 'captor' it's all nice and sweet; loving and caring. The 'captured' is trying to get away as this could still be very wrong, abusive and being stalked. Just my view though. ^-^ (Like Stings/The Police: I'll be watching you.)
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Bekaboou Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Student General Artist
O.0 good job
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:iconfrostglade:
frostglade Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Professional General Artist
bravo
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:iconryanlothar:
ryanlothar Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Describes way too many relationships.
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:iconamillionkisses:
AMillionKisses Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Well someone just wrote a poem about my relationship.
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MapleKitty34 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Student General Artist
"I dunno"
Perfect description for something so deep and beautiful.
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:iconmisakiseattle:
Misakiseattle Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
This is so deep and it conveys such a strong feeling. <3
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:iconlaniellie:
Laniellie Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. Explains my feelings towards someone perfectly.
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:iconsoft-lullaby:
Soft-Lullaby Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this...
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MaliceTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love this! Glad it made the front page!
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opl890 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This perfectly describes me about one of my best friends...
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Sicily-the-time-lady Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Amazing. Very sad, but still amazing.
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NotoriousNat Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
This is so sad! But i LOVE IT! its one of those things that make you sad but you just can't stop reading it over and over again.
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