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Let's play a game.

I don't like the game we play
But he says we have to.
After all, I am
Daddy's little girl.

Don't move...

I can't.
I'm too sad to move.
I don't like this game.
But I am
Daddy's little girl.

There. Wasn't that nice?

No, Daddy.
I don't like our games...
But I guess I have to
Because I'm
Daddy's little girl.

We can play again later.

I don't want to play later!
I don't. Like. Our. Games.
But I have to play them.
Because I'm
Daddy's little girl.

It's fun. Isn't it?

No daddy...
I don't want to be
Daddy's
Little
Girl.

I'm sick of being
Daddy's little girl
In Daddy's world
With Daddy's games.

Let me grab this knife, Daddy.
Let me hurt you, Daddy.
The way you hurt me.
Slowly.

Daddy?
I don't want to be your little girl.

... Daddy...
I want to play a game.
O_O
*shivers*

Just a quick poem I wrote about a sexually abused little girl, NO IT IS NOT NOT NOT NOT NOT A TRUE STORY! Just.... it's not.
Annyway, yeah, sexually abused little girl who kills her sexually abusive father :3 yay.

Comments? critiques? <3
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Allow me to first state that this is a very deep, very awesome piece of literature. I knew right away what it was about, and as a survivor of sexual abuse, this sent chills through me. Not because it was bad! It's so very good!

I like the repetition that you used... "I am, Daddy's little girl". It hinted at what was coming next, and at the same time you know exactly what's going to happen. Please do not think that just because it is predictable that it's not good. Some poems are best when they can be predicted, but at the same time, have a little twist to them, such as this piece.

I also liked how you talked from the father's perspective, the "Don't move", and, "Let's play a game" and all that follows. That's what sent a chill through me. Words are very, very simple, yet so very powerful, and I believe that you captured that brilliantly.

Very nice job! ^ ___^ :iconrainbowsheep2:
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Wow, just wow. There are a lot of poems about young girls being sexually abused by their fathers, but to truly show the anger they feel, enough anger to want to kill their father, that is rare. I love the repetition of "because I'm Daddy's little girl." It makes it show that she is abused very often and her father says she is his little girl often. This is amazing. The rhythm is great. And I could visualize the young girl's tears that go from sad tears to angry tears. It is not often that a sexual abuse victim fights back, especially a little girl. This was fantastic. I love it.
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EtaniaVII Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Um...does writing all this dark stuff have a negative effect on you? I hope not! Anyway, not enough people pay attention to sexually abused children. It means everything to me to support programs that help people like that...very important! Anyway...um...I can't think of much else to say, so I shall depart to go make some cookies for my grandpa. (No really, I am doing that.)
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kenntara833 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I have no idea what to say. The only thing I could think about literally was this:
uhhhhhhhhhhhh.........
But amazing!
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SAMDisbored Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Oh my god my heart actually sank when I read the first part, I knew exactly what was happening. It was amazing, really amazing.
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TheGothicSongbird Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Writer
I love this one. The fast-pace was refreshing.
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HolderOfAwesome Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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menmoli Featured By Owner May 4, 2013
this is very very good
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Freeeeedooom Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Student General Artist
0.0

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:fear:

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TigerDemon12 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
O.O
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
This made me cry.
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Kamizaki-Chan Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
I wonder what goes on through your mind on a daily basis...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Weird stuff O_O
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Kamizaki-Chan Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
I can tell XD
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DyskoDelThunderback Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
Whoa.
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BabyBug-A-Boo13 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student General Artist
*shivers*
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randomfreakygothgirl Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Professional General Artist
This is just perfect. The way it's told is believeable, the style of it just says "keep reading". All around wonderfully done!
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Shirozuke Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
Yet another great example of how simplicity is best. :heart:

The moment I laid my eyes on this deviation thumbnail, I knew what it was about, and I knew it was going to be good. ;) Keep it up.

"I'm sick of being
Daddy's little girl
In Daddy's world
With Daddy's games."

Love this stanza!
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AnimewolfRPC Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Seriously thinking about making this into a song lol, but I won't because it's your beautiful poem. :)
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LovelyIcePrincess Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
creepy, but at the same time artistically well done!
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MissTsukii Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*shivers* seriously!! deep very deep. You don't have to go in detail not a word extra, because you said it ll in such a simple yet powerful manner. Its seriously AWESOME that the victim wins in her daddy's own game. Message delivered my dear friend.
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Yami-Lamia Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope this doesn't come off as snobby or anything...
Its very rare that I read a poem and cringe. This one, although short, had me rather nervous to finish it. You didn't go into much detail at all, but it was so vivid. Its an amazing piece and I thank you for writting and posting it!
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8BriBee8 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Nice job, might suggest a mature tag but nice flow~ simplistic yet deep, love it.
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dawnstaryua Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist
Oh man, this is great.
Using periods and new lines to make it flow, to make each word have more impact. And using such a topic so many people really hate to touch... Just wow, I'm in awe. I love it. Absolutely great ouo
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww :) Thanks so much!
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The next Jigsaw? 0_0

Creepy... I've got chills!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
O.O
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Onakuru Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There are some things in life... doesn't matter how much you can read or write about them, they just won't make any sense.

Good piece, it moved me.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks ^_^
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WhatIsInTheDark Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
I was really relieved when you explained that it's not about you! It's a very deep and great poem though! :hug:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
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WhatIsInTheDark Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
You're welcome. Keep up the good work! :)
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COWWE123 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
poor litle girl glad da dad died
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LunaDianaRaine Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me of some film I saw ages ago...well, that's besides the point.
To out it simply: Y U NO STOP BEING SO AWESOME?
Okay, no, tha would be heartbreaking,
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
D: I'M SORRY!
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LunaDianaRaine Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
DONT BE XD
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holygreatgrandparome Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa.
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lindsay711 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i am really close with my father, we're best friends; and it absolutly sickens me to the core to think a father could do something as vile and discusting and disturbing like that to his own fucking daughter. what is wrong with people?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know...
It's sad that some stuff like this actually happens.
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kioko928 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Very good, however sad. My co-worker was just reading a news story from 2004, this happened to a 6 month old baby, terrible. There is true evil in this world and I wish every child could protect themselves the way this girl was able in you poem, beautifully written, but a terrible scar on the face of humanity.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hate knowing that things like this happen. It sickens me.

Thank you <3
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blackearsbunny Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
mmmmm....i was like mmm....well that is what you get dum daddy!(sorry for the daddy's out there)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, that's what he gets XD Thank you :)
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blackearsbunny Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
NO PROBLEMO MI AMIGA!
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Kreatress Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. That is a very important and horrible subject, and not many people are willing to write about it. I really respect this.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks so much :)
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Kreatress Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :hug:
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vellusz Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sure I've read this somewhere. Or something very similar. But can't remember where.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've written many things related to this.
one went something like..
"Daddy, don't touch me,
it makes me feel..
mad.

Daddy, when i kill you
it makes me feel
Good."

Something like that.
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MarioGamer96 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
The minute I saw the woord Daddy, I knew it had to do with a small girl getting sexually abused, nice job
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you <3
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MarioGamer96 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
Your welcome :)
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