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Let's play a game.

I don't like the game we play
But he says we have to.
After all, I am
Daddy's little girl.

Don't move...

I can't.
I'm too sad to move.
I don't like this game.
But I am
Daddy's little girl.

There. Wasn't that nice?

No, Daddy.
I don't like our games...
But I guess I have to
Because I'm
Daddy's little girl.

We can play again later.

I don't want to play later!
I don't. Like. Our. Games.
But I have to play them.
Because I'm
Daddy's little girl.

It's fun. Isn't it?

No daddy...
I don't want to be

I'm sick of being
Daddy's little girl
In Daddy's world
With Daddy's games.

Let me grab this knife, Daddy.
Let me hurt you, Daddy.
The way you hurt me.

I don't want to be your little girl.

... Daddy...
I want to play a game.

Just a quick poem I wrote about a sexually abused little girl, NO IT IS NOT NOT NOT NOT NOT A TRUE STORY! Just.... it's not.
Annyway, yeah, sexually abused little girl who kills her sexually abusive father :3 yay.

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Allow me to first state that this is a very deep, very awesome piece of literature. I knew right away what it was about, and as a survivor of sexual abuse, this sent chills through me. Not because it was bad! It's so very good!

I like the repetition that you used... "I am, Daddy's little girl". It hinted at what was coming next, and at the same time you know exactly what's going to happen. Please do not think that just because it is predictable that it's not good. Some poems are best when they can be predicted, but at the same time, have a little twist to them, such as this piece.

I also liked how you talked from the father's perspective, the "Don't move", and, "Let's play a game" and all that follows. That's what sent a chill through me. Words are very, very simple, yet so very powerful, and I believe that you captured that brilliantly.

Very nice job! ^ ___^ :iconrainbowsheep2:
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Wow, just wow. There are a lot of poems about young girls being sexually abused by their fathers, but to truly show the anger they feel, enough anger to want to kill their father, that is rare. I love the repetition of "because I'm Daddy's little girl." It makes it show that she is abused very often and her father says she is his little girl often. This is amazing. The rhythm is great. And I could visualize the young girl's tears that go from sad tears to angry tears. It is not often that a sexual abuse victim fights back, especially a little girl. This was fantastic. I love it.
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EtaniaVII Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Um...does writing all this dark stuff have a negative effect on you? I hope not! Anyway, not enough people pay attention to sexually abused children. It means everything to me to support programs that help people like that...very important! can't think of much else to say, so I shall depart to go make some cookies for my grandpa. (No really, I am doing that.)
kenntara833 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I have no idea what to say. The only thing I could think about literally was this:
But amazing!
SAMDisbored Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Oh my god my heart actually sank when I read the first part, I knew exactly what was happening. It was amazing, really amazing.
TheGothicSongbird Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Writer
I love this one. The fast-pace was refreshing.
HolderOfAwesome Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
menmoli Featured By Owner May 4, 2013
this is very very good
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TigerDemon12 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
This made me cry.
Kamizaki-Chan Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
I wonder what goes on through your mind on a daily basis...
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