Have you ever held a needle to your wrist?
Have you ever skipped a meal because you were hungry?
Have you ever punched your stomach before falling asleep?
Have you ever felt wrong, because you told someone you were okay? (After all, lying is bad.)
Have you ever rocked back and forth without realizing, until someone else told you to stop?
Have you ever slammed your head against your wall so you might forget your situation?
Have you ever cried in a thunderstorm so no one would hear your cries for help?
Have you ever worn long sleeves and said it was because you were chilly... then felt horrible? (After all, lying is bad.)
Hello darling, I know you have.
But remember, you're strong. You're worthy.
You're more powerful than your sadness.
You are incredible.
You have been through more than you know,
And fought through more than you know...
And you've survived much more than you know.
You are going to make it.
You are going to push through this.
You are going to live.
But maybe I should say that.
Lying is bad.
I was randomly scrolling through the homepage and saw this, and I must say I wasn't expecting to be so affected by it. I have never done any of those things, but I have had my share of tough situations where I lied because I felt my problems weren't important enough. The line that affected me most was the "crying in a thunderstorm" line, because I have felt like that before, where I have felt that I can't tell others my problems and insecurities, like 'I'm not smart enough' or 'What am I going to do with my life' because they're not important enough to concern others with, it's better to keep them inside. I'm better now, at telling people what I think, what I feel, just focusing on being happy, and I've succeeded, but it's still comforting to know that I'm not alone. Even though the situations may be different that someone else knows how it feels to go through trying times and realize like you said: "you've survived more than you know." I really like this poem, it's beautifully written, very original, and the impact on me was great, I just wrote a poem that's similar to the ending of yours and I may post it soon, thank you for your art, but most of all for your honesty, it can't have been easy writing that to yourself then posting, I commend your courage, and thank you.
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Stylistically I felt it was sort of childish and I was ready to rip it apart but by the end I found myself moved. It felt like it was going in a silly preachy direction about 7/8ths through and then BAM! it takes a hugggeee left turn. You close and open very strongly but I feel it looses something in the middle, perhaps in the rhythm of the writing. Love the Hello Darling, motif, gives it a very sinister/macabre feeling which ties the whole thing together nicely. My only criticism again would be the rhythm of the writing, it feels a little jagged it the length of the lines and not intentionally so. Other than that, very nice piece.
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I've done ALL of these things... wow, scary. But it's beautiful.
i guess we both lie to ourselves and to others, eh?
i dont know how to write my feelings down about this... but girl... you make me feel strong... way stronger everytime i read ur work...
thank you. really, you might have just saved a life.
You, madam, inspire me to share hope putted into art here on DA. Cause I´ve been through much bad things, too. But I made it. With some help of others. (when tiping this, I smile now) Yes, never give up. May the Lord bless you. It is so good, to see people that encourage others to have hope. I hope you carry on. <3 and that you can see all the beauty in life.
A lot of people responding to this as well
beautifully written, as always. You are seriously talented girl. Luv your poems.
This is phantabulous!!!
This is amazing
so much inspiration...... yesh yesh i will do my best :3
This is so very beautiful. It's amazing and inspiring and honest and so personal that it makes me feel connected. I love your work, and it always shows truth that the world may not want to hear. Many times I re-read your works or prompt others, especially those who are depressed or suicidal and looking for help, to read your poems. Thank you for writing, because, in a wonderfully marvelous way, you are actually being there for people, including myself. Please, keep posting your literature.
i neeeeeeeded this thank you c:
I think most of us did at least a few of these things a few times. And we all survived. Don't forget this message yourself, OK?
This is...Beautiful ;w;
that really hit home for me..i used to do alot of those things and many other things as well and to be honest i still have those thoughts but now i try and express it in my art rather than do things to myself.great piece very inspiring <3
Lying...just part of this harsh world.
:'] That was beautiful. Very beautiful. <3