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Mommy, he said it, he said it was true.
Mommy, he said it, he said "I love you."
Mommy, he said it, he said it was real
Mommy, please know how to think, how i feel
Mommy, this love is the truth, it's the way
Mommy, he said it, he said it today.

Mommy, he's lying, he's lying to me
Mommy, he's telling a lie, can't you see?
Mommy, he never did mean what he said
Mommy, his voice is pounding in my head.

Mommy, he's lying, his love isn't pure
Love's a disease and he's finding the cure.
Mommy, he's lying, what else can I say...
Mommy, he hit me, he killed me today.

Mommy, he lied to me, why did he lie?
Mommy, he lied through his tears, through his cries
Mommy, his lies I just couldn't see through
Mommy, he lied to me.
What'd I ever do?
Domestic abuse :(
NOT TRUE.
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this one tells about how sometimes love hurts. as this says, it was a child warning it`s mother about this harsh reality. this one shows about how life can be cruel, sweet or difficult. this can also mean that we need to open our eyes. not everything in our life is fair and truthful and this is a beautiful representation of this. this is a beautifully truthful art, which represents our human nature of trying to open other`s eyes so they won`t get hurt in the long run. this gives everyone a good realization of what life can bring us.
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Silent--Songbird Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful, the child's pure cry for the mother really gives the goose flesh feel ^^
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REMUSJOHN Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
why am I at the top...
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Seizu-sha Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow it's so deep. I can imagen how that child must have felt (if it was real)
You know, by this kind of poems, I imagine a small story and pictures of that child and his mother. It's so sad and I can't help it.

I ask it everytime I see a poem like this, but, my I try to draw a picture based on this poem?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes you may :)
Thanks so much for all the comments, sorry I didn't respond to them all. :)
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Seizu-sha Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Don't worry about that. I'm glad that I may draw ^-^
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EziotheAssassin Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
Again, this hits home, very close to my heart. I guess the past doesn't leave so easily?
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OrchidWhiskers Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Your words flow so brilliantly! I feel so sorry for the narrator, poor thing :( I hope that they all find love and happiness again...
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Changing-Grim Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
OH. MY. GOD.
That was amazing!! Incredibly well written and they it flowed was perfect. Absolutely astoundingly beautiful. Left me really feeling how the people in the poem felt!

Amazing Job!!!!
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Cocolena Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Student Writer
Nice :D
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Beterli-and-Bramblez Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist
love it!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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Beterli-and-Bramblez Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist
You're Welcome. :)
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Pukadella Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks <3
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Pukadella Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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breathinbreathout Featured By Owner May 5, 2013   Writer
GAWD rele good
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol thanks bwandon!
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breathinbreathout Featured By Owner May 6, 2013   Writer
mmmhmm
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OSnappySnapO Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
well this made me think...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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racerman56 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Draws you in and exposes the hurt of being lied to by one who should love you, protect you. Well done
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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SkylaCatEye Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks <3
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AstroGirl123 Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:O
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ManiacalFreak Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So sad... so easy to relate too within my own life (dead beat dad and all). Very good poem, flows very well and sounds good. (:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much <3
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ManiacalFreak Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! (:
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