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Once upon a mystery
Once upon a crime
Once upon a lullaby
Once upon a rhyme
Once upon a thunderstorm
Once upon a lie
Because every nightmare tends to start
With once upon a time.
:) Just something quick i did <3 comments?
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The message this poem conveyed just hit back home for me when I made it to the bottom. The rhyming flow of this poem is amazing and the way it ended has me craving more poetry or literature from you. I cannot suggest any where to improve since all artists succeed in getting their message across no matter the length or diversity of their work. And you are a testament to this with this awesome poem you just wrote.

I see no spelling errors, and there's no room for me to bit nit picky about anything since it's just so simple yet so brilliant. I love it, keep up the great work.
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KawaiiShootingStar Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014
This is amazing! <3 The poem flows very well... there are no breaks in the meter. You conveyed the message beautifully, even through just 35 words. I really like it! ^^


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SpikeyMacksy Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
this is perfect, it's true. My so called 'friends' think this sucks, i will kill them in front of their mum and gut them then feed their guts to their dad.
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sorry...
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maxxedoutdj Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is already amazing, but I feel like this would make a wonderful song. :3
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pctomgirl Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
great job! :) I liked it
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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pctomgirl Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
no problem :)
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DJShaydez Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is amazing! favoriting!
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BillyTree Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wonderfully brilliant
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Arden-Crystal Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Writer
My worst nightmare started as a fairy tale,
One of the best things that ever happened to me.
It all went downhill from there.
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HerMoony Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so true. One of my favorite quotes was always.

"They say dreams come true... They forgot nightmares are dreams to"
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