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Once upon a mystery
Once upon a crime
Once upon a lullaby
Once upon a rhyme
Once upon a thunderstorm
Once upon a lie
Because every nightmare tends to start
With once upon a time.
:) Just something quick i did <3 comments?
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The message this poem conveyed just hit back home for me when I made it to the bottom. The rhyming flow of this poem is amazing and the way it ended has me craving more poetry or literature from you. I cannot suggest any where to improve since all artists succeed in getting their message across no matter the length or diversity of their work. And you are a testament to this with this awesome poem you just wrote.

I see no spelling errors, and there's no room for me to bit nit picky about anything since it's just so simple yet so brilliant. I love it, keep up the great work.
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swooningfangirl Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2015  New member
This is absolutely remarkable. Well done!
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KawaiiShootingStar Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014
This is amazing! <3 The poem flows very well... there are no breaks in the meter. You conveyed the message beautifully, even through just 35 words. I really like it! ^^


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SpikeyMacksy Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
this is perfect, it's true. My so called 'friends' think this sucks, i will kill them in front of their mum and gut them then feed their guts to their dad.
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sorry...
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maxxedoutdj Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is already amazing, but I feel like this would make a wonderful song. :3
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pctomgirl Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
great job! :) I liked it
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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pctomgirl Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
no problem :)
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DJShaydez Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is amazing! favoriting!
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BillyTree Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wonderfully brilliant
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Arden-Crystal Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Writer
My worst nightmare started as a fairy tale,
One of the best things that ever happened to me.
It all went downhill from there.
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:iconhermoony:
HerMoony Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so true. One of my favorite quotes was always.

"They say dreams come true... They forgot nightmares are dreams to"
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:icondevilla666:
devilla666 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
I think you've been reading my mind.
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Midnightbiter Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
LOVE THIS!
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PrincessMiku16 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Nightmares start it off...
As usual, something to be contained inside is expressed in writing. Entertaining all who read~
Quick they might be but they tend to break walls built around readers. Just like me!
I am in love with every piece I read its quite addictive I might say! See you in the near future fellow author.
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NobodiesDragonGirl Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
Very true! I really like this piece!
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dave-bischoff-expess Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Professional General Artist
You're on to something here. The archetypes of fear and dread which can be felt but elude definition are the Myths (i.e., "fairy tales") of old Europe, especially as recorded by the Brothers Grimm.

Their focus was German folklore, whose intertwined tangled roots with other mythologies, can be traced to ancient Babylon.
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moonlightshines9467 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
This is beautiful. well done! :)
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Meeshee123 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student Writer
I wish I could give something more constructive, but all I can say is I LOVE this poem!
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MelanieThonk Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I wish I could just favorite your account...It would make things much easier because I love all of you poetry... T.T
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Puppyeyes427 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oi, you are, one of the best, Poets, I have ever, ever, found. The Stars looked down upon me as I searched through the Poems of DA. Keep on writing, mate.
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HinataKeks Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
I love this poem.
It flows very good and is easy to read.
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SeraphinaPitchiner Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!! :)
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SeraphinaPitchiner Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome. My father also likes it.
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demonsLOVer1 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
This has to be favorite one yet.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you. :)
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Lulu-3 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is absolutely touching. I've read several of your poems and this seems especially striking to me; I can really connect to it. I absolutely love your work! :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, so much! <3
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Now this is what I love in a poem. It's not overly complex with rhymes and metre but it still speaks a lot.
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TheGothicSongbird Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Writer
For as short as it is, it's quite lovely. I enjoyed it very much! :iconblackheartplz:
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ellaeaglex Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
really good for short work!![link]
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Simple but amazing.
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Miss-sunshine-fairy Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
Quick, clever, amusing.
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MizuPics Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
I'm reaching for my guitar... :) This should be some kind of bridge to a longer song. :)
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:iconmikkimarie:
MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I loved what you sent to me! <3
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MizuPics Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
In the bizarre off chance I ever got paid, I'd totally pay you, but I don't think it'll ever get that far!! <3
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MizuPics Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
Meep! I'm not a professional or anything, do I have your permission to play this for like, friends and stuff? :)
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:iconmikkimarie:
MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes of course :)
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TormentaDeEstrellas Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wonderfully written.
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xZ0MBiiEx Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this, great job!
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theghostofjen Featured By Owner May 7, 2013
i absolutely love this!!!!
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:iconmikkimarie:
MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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theghostofjen Featured By Owner May 8, 2013
welcome :)
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CrimsonChandelier Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Positively brilliant work.
Captivating beyond explanation.
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Winter995 Featured By Owner May 7, 2013
Amazing
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. Very nice, indeed.
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breathinbreathout Featured By Owner May 4, 2013   Writer
love it
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:iconmikkimarie:
MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Tank you!
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breathinbreathout Featured By Owner May 4, 2013   Writer
muah pleasure
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BabyBug-A-Boo13 Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful
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