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Tiny little body
Quiet little heartbeats.
See this little pea? That's how big you are right now.
But Mommy doesn't know that yet.

Little fingers start to grow
out of tiny little hands.
See this little peanut? That's how big you are right now.
But Mommy doesn't know that yet.

Your tiny legs start to grow
out of your sweet little body.
See this little pencil tip? That's how big your footprints are right now.
But Mommy doesn't know that yet.

But, surprise!
"I'm pregnant."

Suddenly, tragedy.
Weak little heartbeat.
Weak little baby.
See these smiles on our faces? That's how loved you are right now.
But you don't know that yet.

Gone little heartbeat.
Gone little baby.
See us walking into the doctor's office? That's how excited we are right now.
But you don't know that yet.

And, surprise.
"I'm so sorry for your loss."

Sad Mommy.
Lost baby.
See these tears on our faces? That's how much we love you right now.
But you don't know that yet.

Miscarriage.
Tiny baby.
Lost baby.
A baby that had Daddy's eyes and Mommy's smile.
A baby that only wanted to say
I
Love
You.
A baby that gave the best little hugs.
The sweetest little smiles.
The greatest little giggles.
But, surprise.

Mommy doesn't know that yet.
Yes, my mother went in for an ultrasound today. Sadly they found no heartbeat, and she is expected to have a miscarriage... the day after tomorrow.
Comments? Critiques? I appreciate all. <3
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Firstly, I must admit that I completely sympathize with this; a few years ago, a dear friend of mine had a miscarriage on what was supposed to be the day of her baby shower. This poem illustrates the stunning grief of a lost baby in the most gorgeously heartbreaking way.
But emotional prejudice aside, the use of perspective here is smart and seamless, in a way that makes it play out almost like some horrific fairy tale or bedtime story. But the real impact comes from the way the words are written, rather than the words themselves, which I find quite ingenious, especially the phrase, "I love you". It's beautifully agonizing!
Best regards to you and your family. I feel inclined to offer you my simple heartfelt advice; stay close to each other, and know that brighter days will come again, in spite of the grief you feel now.
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The poem is so heartbreakingly magnificent. The asymmetric expressions of every sad heartbeat, every despair and every tear goes with every every line, every stanza and every word. The expressions of unexpected surprises mixed with unfulfilled hope and grief of an unborn baby, who can never see the world for the first time, and cut short before going out of a mother's womb, and never feeling love after birth, whether it's abortion, miscarriage or disasters, touched me and possibly everyone else's. A great poem like that deserves to be shared and spoken in the memory of all unborn children all over the world.

Keep writing and move on.
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SingingWolf240 Featured By Owner May 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me of my bro...
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carbonatedgirl Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I cried. Now all I can think of is the one I lost.......
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013
It's really sad. A full great life that child had ahead. But death did his job too soon.
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Gabjas Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am so sorry to hear that. On a brighter side of hings, this poem was amazing... as always. :) Thank you for bringing this talented piece of art into the world.
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ziuziu12 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I had a twin that died before they even HAD a heartbeat.
I still wonder what he or she would be like.
I still think maybe he or she would make my life happier.
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T-J-A-Y-E Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That was so sad :(
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kenntara833 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I am so sorry for the loss of your unborn baby brother or sister. You are in my prayers.
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Sneeuwmaan Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so beautiful... my aunt actually had the same a year ago... and so had my grandma. she died while giving birth, and the baby was dead. the graves of my grandma and my aunt or uncle are the same. i was just not born yet, and my mum fearde to give birth to me cuz she thought it would happen to her as well.
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Caro-Kitty Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My mother had two miscarriages so this touch me in a special way. Beautifully written.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so sorry :(
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Caro-Kitty Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Its okay. It affected her more than me and my sister (we were under 10). My brother was born right after that. I guess that's the silver lining in that situation.
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Harajukuterasu Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist
AAaww~ Y did u have to make me cry!? QnQ
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Because I'm evil of course! :D
Thank you :)
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Harajukuterasu Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist
Np!
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g-girl1 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Student
So heartbreaking.. and sadly so true.. I hope your mother is okay ♥
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Kat-Teeth Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im sorry for you loss
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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Kat-Teeth Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Np
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MystroTheDefender Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
--You see so many poems and stories about abortions from the baby's view, I was worried when I started to read this because I thought it another one of them.--

I'm sorry for your loss. My mother lost what would have been a boy, due to stress, he would be 14 now had everything gone to plan.
I still wonder what he would have been like, and I still get upset thinking about it.
I hope you're able to get over this.
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SonAshleyandIvy Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OMIGOD THAT'S SO TERRIBLE.
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have to say this is my favorite of yours. Being someone who lost a child (even though it was 30 years ago) you got to me and I wept for that child gone.. That is powerful writing..
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I am so sorry for lose. I lost a child 30 years ago. Never saw him smile, never saw him walk. Never heard say "daddy" believe me I still feel it now. My heart goes out to you and your mother. You take care and be there for her. Because she is going need you...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are very welcome. And whatever you don't stop writing ok..
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NorwegianAnime Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
I feel so sorry for all of you. Stay strong, you will be in my thougths<3
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TheFabulousHeather Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm sorry. :( :hug:s
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alexyorim Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for accepting my critique. And condolences for what happened. Rest assure that you'll have another sibling. Just hope and pray for it.
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Echoe-kimi Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
=( this is amazingly done.....
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks brah. :)
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adrienne-paynter Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Brought me to tears. Perfectly written. I'm very sorry that this happened to your family. :heart:
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SparrowsFlame Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so sorry. :cries: This is beautifully written though. I love how you went through each step. Such emotion in it. I know some of our most powerful works come through pain. Praying for your family. :hug:
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ccsindil Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
I lost a baby, it's one of the most heartbreaking things I have ever had to go through. This poem, it makes me feel so sad. I just don't have words for it really. It is a good poem, I guess it just makes me wish that I could have known my baby.
I'm sorry for your Mother's loss, I know that pain all to well. I'm sorry for your loss as well, and for the rest of your family.
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Shurikatt Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
This really left tears in my eyes..I'm so sorry for your lost. :iconcryingplz:
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Shankies Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Awh my dear, it's beautiful, I'm reading this through my tears.

I'm sorry about your loss <3

Best wishes <3
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DisneyHeart96 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Seriously made me cry. My mom had a miscarriage, but I wasn't old enough to know and understand until a couple of years ago. Thank you for writing this beautiful piece and my comforts and regards go to your mother :heart:
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Curryruu Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
SDFLKJWELKJSDFLKJ ;________;
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Bugaboo972 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm sure your hearing this all over the place, but i am sincerly sorry for your loss. I truly am. I know i'm just some person on the internet, but the pain is real. your poem brought me to tears... and I don't cry often. I wish your family luck in all of your troubles and tribulations now and in the future.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I appreciate every time someone says that, it means a lot <3
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Brookiethecookieface Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student General Artist
This is a beautiful poem. I'm sorry for your loss, and know that one day you will be able to see him/her.
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Mingamia Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This got me teared up. :icondesucraiplz: I'm sorry about your loss. I hope for a miracle to make everything better. :pray:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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Redneberif Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   Writer
Just remember that you will see him or her some day. . . and she'll be giving you one of those sweet little smiles.
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AllieofLink1 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im sorry for you loss. :(
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LadyDesmoria Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm very sorry for your loss. My mother went through something like this before I was born but we believe he or she went straight to heaven because they were perfect. I believe the same with this little one. They came down got a body and went straight to heaven. Sorry for getting all religious on ya. But your poem brought tears to my eyes. My sister lost her best friend recently who was like a sister and a daughter to our family. I will keep your family in my prayers
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FlightoftheOwl Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so sorry. <3
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jaio1 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I felt so sad reading through until I got to the end. Then I had that little happy/hopeful feeling.
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AmericanoHooker Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My stepmom had two misscarriages and my mom had an ectopic pregnancy. I'm blessed to have three healthy little brothers and a recently new born sister, but I'll never forget my three other siblings who never made it. :heart:
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Jazzlednightmare16 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Aww that is so sad :(. I am so sorry for your loss. I can't imagine what that must feel like. How far along was she?
I am so very sorry for the loss :(.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She was eight weeks along we think. :( thank you.
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Jazzlednightmare16 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Aww :(
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