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My breath began to choke me. I sprinted through the thick forest, my hair tangled and my skin covered in blood. Fallen branches scraped at my open wounds as wind howled through the trees. My ripped t-shirt felt like it was suffocating me.  I couldn’t breathe. I couldn’t think. I couldn’t escape. A seemingly invisible tree root tripped me as I tried once again to find a way out of the forest. I landed with a thud in the dirt. In panic, I quickly crawled to a tree and sat, confused and terrified.
My name is Hazel Moon. I don’t know where I am. I don’t know how to escape. And I don’t know who he is.
But he’s trying to kill me.

I got up, and suddenly, a hand covered my mouth furiously.  I tried to scream, but my body was in such a shock that no sound could come out. I tried to break free, but I couldn’t.  
What was happening? My thoughts raced through my mind. I tried to scream again, and finally, I actually made a sound.
The hand on my mouth became stronger.
“Shut up,” whispered Jack. “He’s coming.”
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TracyStromberg Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! That was so good!
AbductedSanity Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013
great work! i really enojoyed this....breath taking and heart stopping. amazing
AerithEchidna4rt Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa o.o Awesome!
Bloodymary626 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting opening. I will defently read any chapters you post of this.
GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013
Interesting start. Looks promissing.
Diomedeez Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so eerie! I wannna know more!!!
KandiKane1719 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist
Holy hell :iconwoahplz:
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