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Take this kiss upon your hand,
For the ones who starved themselves,
Because "ugly" was written all over their mirrors,
Because "fat" was the only thing in their way.

Take this hug around your shoulders,
For the ones who cried themselves to sleep,
Because, unlike everyone else,
Their pillows kept their secrets.

Take this wish for your success,
For the ones with wounds blanketing their wrists,
Because physical pain gave feeling,
And feeling was so hard to find.

Take this whisper in your ear,
For the ones who live through pain,
Through sorrow, through regret,
Through loneliness in crowded rooms,
Through nightmares and judgement and hatred...

Take these words, darling,
These words I say to you.

Stay strong. Never give up. Keep breathing.
Continue inspiring.

Let's keep going,
For the ones who starved themselves,
For the ones who cried themselves to sleep,
For the ones with wounds blanketing their wrists,
For the ones who live through pain,
For the ones forced to survive...

And for the ones who never did.
I don't think this really needs a description.

However, here's a few words for you.

If you're feeling down, lost, hurt, confused, depressed, or even just a little bit upset... Note me. I'm here to help, and if i can't help, well.. I promise to listen.

You guys are the most wonderful people in the world to me. Okay? You guys have made me happier than anything. 

Please, stay strong. <3


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There are many people in this world with potential to make this world a paradise but they have one thing in common: They rarely feel themselves or even others - not to speak of the impact they could have on others by sharing their feelings and creativity.

From the bottom of my heart: THANK YOU!

Thank you for writing this wonderful, entertaining, touching piece of poetry.
Thank you for sharing feelings and hope in words that impact many, not just few.
While your words are beautiful they also have meaning!
Something rare these days it seems.
Thank you for finding the right words to make people think, cause that's what art is for!
Not just to give hope and faith in sth. Good in the world, to those who need support,
but to make people think about the impact they leave on others in general.

So you've accomplished sth. stunning:
You helped twice!
You give those who need it hope AND you may (have) prevent(ed) some bad people from continuing on their path of destruction and made them maybe help on occasion...

I write this critique with the utmost joy because you seem to understand the concept of giving.
And that, I might add, in beautiful words!

As I've already mentioned, your technique is excellent but you still manage to transport a meaningful message without compromising between message & style.
And that's what really left me speechless.

FULL POINTS!
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This is absolutely beautiful.
This 100% that I've given is one that is from the bottom of my heart
Thank you so much for this
I've actually starved myself and cried myself to sleep, I've lived through pain.
And I can tell this will help me survive the future.

And if anyone gives you any hate for this, just ignore them.
If anyone hates on this it means that they don't know true pain, and don't understand it.

This is an amazing poem, and you're an amazing writer. I love your work.

Well, all I can say is stay amazing, dear.

~Kokobutter
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really love your poem's they pack such a punch gahh! :) so jealous ! but you inspire me nonetheless <3
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evettejo Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This could easily be altered into an Anthem song. Ya know what I mean? Beautiful.
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PurryProductions-Inc Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing ;;
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Sweetly-Demonic Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
I've been having a rough time lately, and thanks to your poems .. to this poem .. my tears seem to stop. So thank you, so much <3
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: Thank you for making my day.
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BlueBrains Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
This is amazing, it reminded me how I felt when I didn't have a shoulder to cry on or someone who cared how I felt during the nights I cried my self to sleep while the days were filled with bullies and judgemental people, nagging me for being too skinny, while I read my spare time away, my 'friends' slowly turning their back on me... 
I cried reading this, I hope anyone that's going through what I had to, has that one person...
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've felt this too... I cry a lot.... Some say too much, but it just.. Tears can say what I can't sometimes. Unfortunately, b/c I cry so much some people don't take them as seriously... So thank you for writing about it.
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anabelalima98 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Student Writer
Join our group please!!! Master-of-creation

Get your poems featured today! :)
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PamFreak101 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
Wow, this is so beautiful and lovely! 
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crimsonphoenix14 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
This is beautiful, just pure beauty, I can't even put words into it...
"Beautiful" won't just describe this, you my friend are a fantastic poet.
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AerithEchidna4rt Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
<3 A piece of beauty :')
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somebodyinthisworld Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
Wonderful, 

Donīt realy know how to describe how wonderful it is. 

:)
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NovEllecatser Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, made me cry a little because I can relate and I never cry over things like this. Truly amazing. I wish I could write like this, I pale in comparison. Just simply amazing.
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PaperAnomaly Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so simple but lovely
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MayaHaka Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is soooo beautiful 
With this poem you'll save lots of lifes you know that right 
Thanks for inspiring us all Mikki Nod 
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Sarrain Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
Mind blowing! Absolutely mind blowing!!   Excellent piece of literature. 
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KAkkoiITO Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful! Spoken from a person who's felt pain no doubt.
This makes me want to play "Born this way" by Lady Gaga again. Sweating a little... 
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shawnthewolf12 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
THANK YOU! Because if you, I will survive. 
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honeydewsweetie Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
this is…. amazing. outstanding. Thank you for writing this
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Bladeheart777 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
I stumbled across this and I have to say thanks for the best way to get out of a dark place, random insightfulness from a complete stranger. Thanks for devotion to those bordering on lost.
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Lyrically-Sadistic Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

444 Deviations were made

So the world wouldn't feel quite so cold.
4,432 Comments received

With joy by this thirteen-year-old.
33,648 Pageviews she raked in,

With kisses to the rear ends of strangers;
0 Scraps does she eat from the table now,

Gorging herself on the attention it's gained her.
1,788 Watchers got stroked on their egos,

Arousing them (so they won't die tonight.)
0 Critiques will she give them, for any reason;

The hand that feeds must not feel a bite.
0 Forum Posts made, for that place is for trolls

And she would never be worshipped there, ever!
467 Favourites to the ones most devout,

Singing praise at her every endeavor!

 

She's the goddess of empathetic quid-pro-quo,

Jimi Hendrix on Heartstring Guitar;

Turning the greatest art site on the face of the net

Into a glory hole for the tearful and bizarre.

 

I smell the rage of the cult, I'll be burned at the stake

Because the Kool-Aid tastes quite icky to me,

But I, "Trigger Warning," am okay with this fate;

There's no place for the truth spoken frankly.

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cakep0p Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013   Digital Artist
this is beautiful! I love this
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Noxe-ApplePi Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student General Artist
This is so inspiring!
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TwentyfootAngels Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
May all red drops be polished white, and the milky way be born of our scars. Cheers, my friend, to the strand of pearls we made of tomorrow mornings.
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SakuraCrystalKatana Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student General Artist

Oh my gosh...this is beautiful.

 

I cried.

 

(I've felt this before...)

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Puppyeyes427 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are such an amazing person, Mikki. :)
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FangirlCreations Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
It really hits you hard but sometimes that's the best kind of poetry.
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FireheartTheInferno Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know this resounds in the hearts of many people I know, including myself. Keep doing what you do and never stop being you. This is an wonderful poem. Bless you.
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
It's so inspiring... Thanks a lot for writing this.
This world needs more people like you, you know?
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Lasoiree Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
The way you wrote this is inclusive and inviting, speaking first directly to those needing uplifting...but then inspiring the same reader to think of the others in that situation, whether they have been a hurt one or not. It engages all. Wonderful work
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SilvTHedgehog Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks for writing this... it really helps
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emerarudosempai Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Simply beautiful <3
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liveartaslifeart Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013

Oooh so YOU'RE the one who wrote this.. I saw this on the front page as I was logging in, I kept trying to find it.. I couldn't and I was crushed @_@ When I can't find works I wanted to read, I just.. :P Bleh.


But.


This is so full of emotion, I can't even.. Like, I have no idea.. The last time I felt this much emotion was like... (Probably the last time I read something on dA but :P)


And the last *two-ish?* line(s).


I swear, they nearly broke me.


How do you freaking draw THISMUCHEMOTION into words?!


You know why drawing emotion into words is so HARD?


Because the English language (or any earthly language, really) is just SO DARN LIMITEDDD *Sob*


BUT YOU DO IT! GAWD, YOU DO IT.


You're just an amazing person.


Now we people who watch you on dA, we're going to sit here and watch you become famous someday.


And when that happens, just remember us little people <3

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LittlePuffy4ever Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow so... perfect and truly... You had whitten the first poem where's I cried a lot. Really, your poem is so awesome... I love when you say: "and for the ones who never did". I never liked poems a lot, but I'm im love with your poem. Congratulations!!!!! :hug:
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Memory-Of-Lakaeos Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
<3
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wisteria789 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
Simply beautiful, really.
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rose3709 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i absolutly love this poem it hits home inside me . you just put all my feelings of what i felt for years in just one poem . i think im just gona read it every day 
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Taiwann15 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Every piece of this poem describes me on what I've done in the past keep writing because you may just save a life 
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I needed this today, thank you, for after undergoing heavy treatment for my depression and having to go back in it only a month ago. I needed a reminder, for a person whose friends have abandoned her and rumors have become close friends. :( (Sad) 

It's an inspiring and lovely piece. 
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AmbitiousAuthor Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
There are so many people that need to hear this.  You have amazing talent and it's great to see you use it in such a way that it impacts others the way it does.
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful right down to the ending...
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queenzasha Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This made me cry...I went through all of this...and lost the person who told me this...;w; very good, this is great writing.
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Buggiecar Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
Thank you.
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xSummerSan Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student Writer
This needs a DD.
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alissa10 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Love this
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moonlight311 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
This poem should be made into a song..every one needs to see and hear the message given.Thanks  for writing it.
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BritainShadow Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh dear. this is just so beautiful . thanks for writing such amazing things.
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awakebutasleep Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
HELLO THERE!! If you are reading this and feeling down, Well there is a website (blahtherapy.com/ ) where you can vent your emotions anonymously! or you can listen and help people as well! I hope this helps! (:
Enjoy~~

(Sorry for the caps, just wanted to get your attention.)
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SilentLove832 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for this,beautiful author.
QuQ
Ive been trying to commit suicide for anlong time now,
But this had helped me cure that tendency.
Thank you.
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Anatomicalthought Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Utterly beautiful. 
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