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Daddy likes to make me
Eat my words.
I see him hit Mommy
And I know she hurts.

So I tell him, to get her
He has to go through me.
And, well, I can no longer walk
And I can no longer see.

Daddy makes me eat my words
And reality starts to flood.
Yes, Daddy makes me eat my words…
And my words taste like blood.
Not sure if i like this one, but i LOVE the idea, simply because I got the idea from this amazing artist : :iconreniraiero:
Thank you for letting me use this idea! :)

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xxatouchofrostxx Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really powerful. Brilliant job, like usual. ;D
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Loving-Chakra Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Not only are your words in this poem simplistically stellar, but the skeleton of your poem is superb and deeply profound. I love how the structure is controlled at the beginning, IE. an ABAB scheme, but as it goes along there is less structure. It's as if the speaker has lost control of his or her emotions as the rhyme scheme in the middle changes and is more distant. Emotions seem to be reined in as the rhyming pattern becomes similar to the beginning.
Though this is only my brief take on your poem and from what I can remember learning from one of my college professors.
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whatifguyplz Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
even if your dad hits you that's no reason to write poems about killing him. Please, let the authorities handle it don't kill your dad
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I won't haha. These are just stories :)
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Fable4693 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
I found an easy answer to our problems. Look at this I already started
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1shilo1 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Student General Artist
This poem touches me in a way i just can't explain!
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hgaillard Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
It is so beautiful! I love this poem! I try to read it everyday! It is SOOOOOOO BEAUTIFUL!
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Sherjaxon Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, the last stanza brings it home! Bravo!!
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RedemptiaRebourne Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Heartbreaking and brilliant
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