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The face at the door is a demon, a god
He smiles through stitches, his stare rather odd
The face at the door is a cruel, silent being
Yet, people are calm, and the children aren't fleeing
Quiet yourself, for you're the only one
Crying for help at the point of a gun
Learn how to fly, rather, learn how to fall,
The face at the door... well... there's no face at all.
About a hallucination I had.
Thanks for reading... comments and critiques? <3
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EPIC TWIST
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koreauchiha Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
I really dont mean to seem rude, or uncaring or anything, but have you talked to anyone about these hallucinations? They can actually be very dangerous.
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waterphoenix25 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student General Artist
wow, I really love this, the imagery is amazing!
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Midnightbiter Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
IDK why but when I read this I think the reader is the true demon...
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DoubleButtercream Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
A hallucination? What caused it?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My disorder.
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demonsLOVer1 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
This is touching...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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Caro-Kitty Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very moving
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Twisted-Curiosity Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student
I like this one, too. But my door is a mirror. :blush:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
O_o
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ArtsyTiger Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love it love it love it love it
The rhyming is just beautiful and it flows so beautifully.
Why can't I write like this:'(
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry!Thanks so much! <3
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ArtsyTiger Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! haha:)
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Cklovingston Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Student Writer
Another master piece <3
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AstroGirl123 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very good. I'd love to do a drawing based on one of your poems or something.....
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Go ahead! ^_^
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AstroGirl123 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ok but later on...ill ask u for an idea soon ok sweatie.
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GrimdarkElusive Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
I love this.

So awesome. <3
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! <3
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immortalSi Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student Writer
As a girl with schizophermia (spelling? It's creepy to have a condition you can't even spell) this scares me a little bit. I am sorry if my personal boudaries are blurry, but have you been diagnosed with it too? Since I volunteer at a public library, with kids around, more often than not, I can't afford to freak out when I see things. It would be nice to get some feedback from someone who might understand. Anyway, I love the poem. It speaks volumes for one such as myself.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm too young to have schizophrenia. I have Bipolar 1 with Psychotic Features :)
I'd imagine schizophrenia is much worse :(
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Chrissiemusa Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very scary and captures the hallucination well. They do say to write what you know, and you write very well :)
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks love :)
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Chrissiemusa Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome :)
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Creepy... do you still get hallucinations? I know I would absolutely flip out if I had one >.<

I scare easily. Shush.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They're really scary actually. Yeah I still have them. O_O
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Everyone has issues >.<

Stay strong! And remember that you now have about a hundred more people who care for you in the interwebs. =D
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hhehhe :3
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SomeLameStuff Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have a lot more fans than I do! Unfair!

Also, are you planning on taking part in Camp NaNoWriMo? It's brilliant fun, and you get to meet a bunch of other writers as well =P

Linkies on my page if you want it!
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cosartmic Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. I could totally tell that it was based off a hallucination
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thanks <3
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cosartmic Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're very welcome!!!
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Fb-PHE13 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, powerful hallucination, it seems.


But, it's very well written.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It wasn't too bad. It's all good :)
Thank you ^.^
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Fb-PHE13 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's good. :3


Welcome!
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breathinbreathout Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013   Writer
WIN
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank ya :D
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