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King being murdered upon the throne
Dreams made out of solid stone
Learn to fly and learn to crash
Nightmares in a lightning flash
Life's what you get, not what you earn
Too bad you sat back and watched it burn...
I submitted this poem one day before with an ending from someone else. But I liked this ending that :iconbetty-kane: gave me. So I had to resubmit it. :) I wrote the majority of it, and the ending was given to me :)
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BarneyBetsington Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the upload. Good work. :)
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unp021 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
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project-7077 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
no economic problems since i started it
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BillyTree Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
perfect
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WolfKidz Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
Nice~

~Rattata
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LalalandMuse Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Student Writer
Oooh, I like this! My favorite lines are "Dreams made out of solid stone," and "Learn to fly and learn to crash." Love it. Great job :D
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Puppyeyes427 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Another good ending would be: Forge your own path, the one you yearn.

Or: It's time for you to take your turn.

Or even: Watch it play and try to learn.

^^
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dreamingdays Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013
beautiful writing ^^
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DemoOps Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
I like it!
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thecappy Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
'Nother good one.

Although I might consider revising "learn to fly and learn to crash // Nightmares in a lightning flash"its too convenient of a rhyme (just my opinion, of course). Too "hit you over the head" if you know what I mean, but that's just me :). Otherwise, this is an awesome piece and the last line brings it all together really nicely. It's very image inducing.
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Blueyay Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Seriously badass
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Lilpanda332 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Freakin amazing!!!!!!
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Evalnia Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing!
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wonderful poem again
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trickmaster1 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Somehow I read this and I wonder who's the king... I think it's cool that it could be anybody but at the same time, the fact that I wondered about that first somehow makes this more interesting.
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I was ok with the previous ending but this one is just as good.
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hiivala Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) I bet you could reword the last line to make it flow better

Omit the word "back" maybe?
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Midnightbiter Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
This made my heart skip a beat!
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Gothfoxgirl Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
short but to the point good job
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SilviaMarti Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Another beautiful piece <3
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