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Well, you're not anorexic. So you must be fat.
A fat, ugly person.

Well, you fit in with the crowd. You must be a fake.
A fake wannabe.

Well, you're happy. What are you hiding?
You've got to be hiding something.

Well, you're sad. You must be emo.
An emo attention seeker.

Well, you're popular. So you must be a jerk.
Why would anyone like you in the first place?

Well, you're quiet. You must be a nobody.
Nobody at all.

Well, you're you.
What else could go wrong?
I know i know "I'm so sick of these poems"... well that's okay :3 i appreciate all comments, even negative ones <3
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It's a pretty simple poem with a clear and simple message. I like how you cut the verses so it has that "realistic" vibe. The last one though... I understand the voice of this verse, but the transition from the sixth verse to the last verse isn't very smooth. You could probably put another verse there summarizing the effect of the earlier verses while subtly showing the idea of a lesson learned. It might work better that way. Other than that, the originality is there, the title is eye-grabbing, it's not boring at all, and the whole effect of the poem is very convincing. Also, I must commend your placing the poem in the right section. ^_^
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Critique by 333hf333 Mar 23, 2013, 8:12:27 AM
The message and delivery are both rather overused, but then again, it is hard to think of anything completely new nowadays. However, it does give a thoughtful insight into society and how stereotyping falls into its own trap. I suppose that people don't often take notice publicly about issues such as this, but on this website and others akin to it such as tumblr or popular forums, this is a rather popular subject.

This is an ideal message to be sending out to people, but the only difficulty is the platform used. It's wonderful, but you're preaching to the choir.
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blueleo98 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Wow this really speaks to me. This reminds me of the way people tend to over judge, in fact judging and gossip were the main themes of my middle school. I really think your poems are great. This poem really shows how many people think its almost bad to be yourself, but people don't realize that molding yourself to every one else's expectations eventually makes them nobody, while Being yourself and pursuing your passions makes them somebody. I think if you keep writing these amazing poems you will be somebody someday!!!!!!!
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PrincessMiku16 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Your poems are the best! I just happened to be lucky enough to stumble upon it!
:D You write the truth! I love it!
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TheMadTrumpeter Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree on this one.
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Blackehpo13 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
I actually really liked this, it tottaly explained how society kinda works. Keep on writing!! You're great!!!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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ElleDays Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
another person already written about this before you did owo

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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Uhm... that's me XD
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ElleDays Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
kay forget the comment:')
You ''updated'' the poem! :')

Ohmy i'm sorry xD well I like the one you wrote before this one c:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol that's fine :)
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ElleDays Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
I'm really sorry!
I love your poem serously!
Nowadays all what people care about is 'the outside'

sorry if my english is bad;3;
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avaronkurosawa Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Student Writer
i like your poems...
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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g-girl1 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Student
So true, society is a bitch. ♥
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efawlsh16 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Student Writer
I love this. Just simply love it. :hug:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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efawlsh16 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome :hug:
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Shinigami-Rem-san Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist
A nice poem with a good point, I like it :3
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lordinglip666 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
The number of people misunderstand in the comment section, and interpreting it as agreeing with these opinions, is absolutely astounding.

I think it's very nicely worded, well done. :)
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Shiki-J Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   Digital Artist
It's sounds all true yes, but it kind of sounds like somebody is judging everyone.. Also when you're sad it doesn't make u emo.. What if they have depression? Or what if something is going on in their life? And emo is just an expression... And careful what you write in your poems someone can take it in the wrong way... Know I'm saying?
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
These are not my opinions. I understand that people have serious depression and serious problems in their life <3 thank you though. :)
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Shiki-J Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   Digital Artist
:) no prob
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
k .
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tyroneclad Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
These kinds of poem are so annoying because they're so autistic and close minded. Don't be a so closed and evasive person, you got to change yourself sometimes to join the society.
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Eragon-vs-Murtagh Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
I don't think you understood this poem.
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pedro-velez Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great poem for reflection.
Society has the terrible habit of sticking labels in people like they are items. I say screw society for that. People are what they are and not something to be labeled and rated. ;)
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Even if you are sick of these poems or don't want to write them they seem to be letting you vent. Also I love these poems because they say what no one else will.
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NickolaRovox Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
I have to say, this is all true on how people see other people. There the also themes we can see in every from video games to TV show's.
I never thought some one could right some thing this simple but so powerful, great job my friend.
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melxcrimson Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
These things are so annoying but they do speak the truth abut some people. (not me.) :P
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Dickywebster Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Everything can go wrong! :D
Including people assuming there must be something wrong with someone who seems happily enough while not having any of the stuff society says people need to be happy =P
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MattPatrick Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
All these poems kind of have the same message and feel to them. Not that that's bad, necessarily. Just an observation. Good job though :)
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VictoriaRay Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, this is amazingly true... makes me want to rethink how i think about some peopl :/ thanks
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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VictoriaRay Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you are welcome!
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Sarafan206 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
I hate when my friends are always saying things like "Oh, all popular kids are b*tchy and sl*tty and *ssholes and etc." when I know for a fact that they've never even had a real conversation with them. :( I was never really exposed to it before high school, because I made it clear in elementary and middle school that I wouldn't deal with any sort of harassment, and my friends were drawn to that. But now all of a sudden they seem to be "growing up", or at least they think so, and I have to deal with them all fighting with each other about the most ridiculous things. They even try to pick fights with me, and I just won't deal with it. It makes me sad that I feel almost driven away from my friends because all of the arguing and complaining.

I never have anyone to talk to because of it. It's rather disheartening.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm sorry :(
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Sarafan206 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Yeah... but I'm slowly making new friends :) new, much less judgmental friends. I hope you don't have that issue (or get that issue) :hug:
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yugijak Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love poems like this and I never get tired of them. Really!

And this kind of follows fairly closely how people think when they presume.

Well done.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks a bunch <3
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yugijak Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome.
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MythosHaven Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
I like it. Simple and succinct.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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MythosHaven Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
Welcome. :)
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BronyBeforePony Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have seen a poem like this on here before, if you are this you are that, dealing with absolutes.
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MauraGreen Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist
I'm sorry to tell you, but there was almost the same poem two or three weeks ago.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know =P i write these types of poems kind of a lot :blush:
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JewelLuvsMarshmellow Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting.. I really liked this poem!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! <3
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dotsweare Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
There is only one critique I feel is worth making: anorexia nervosa is a mental illness, not a body type.
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