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Well, you're not anorexic. So you must be fat.
A fat, ugly person.

Well, you fit in with the crowd. You must be a fake.
A fake wannabe.

Well, you're happy. What are you hiding?
You've got to be hiding something.

Well, you're sad. You must be emo.
An emo attention seeker.

Well, you're popular. So you must be a jerk.
Why would anyone like you in the first place?

Well, you're quiet. You must be a nobody.
Nobody at all.

Well, you're you.
What else could go wrong?
I know i know "I'm so sick of these poems"... well that's okay :3 i appreciate all comments, even negative ones <3
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It's a pretty simple poem with a clear and simple message. I like how you cut the verses so it has that "realistic" vibe. The last one though... I understand the voice of this verse, but the transition from the sixth verse to the last verse isn't very smooth. You could probably put another verse there summarizing the effect of the earlier verses while subtly showing the idea of a lesson learned. It might work better that way. Other than that, the originality is there, the title is eye-grabbing, it's not boring at all, and the whole effect of the poem is very convincing. Also, I must commend your placing the poem in the right section. ^_^
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The message and delivery are both rather overused, but then again, it is hard to think of anything completely new nowadays. However, it does give a thoughtful insight into society and how stereotyping falls into its own trap. I suppose that people don't often take notice publicly about issues such as this, but on this website and others akin to it such as tumblr or popular forums, this is a rather popular subject.

This is an ideal message to be sending out to people, but the only difficulty is the platform used. It's wonderful, but you're preaching to the choir.
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blueleo98 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Wow this really speaks to me. This reminds me of the way people tend to over judge, in fact judging and gossip were the main themes of my middle school. I really think your poems are great. This poem really shows how many people think its almost bad to be yourself, but people don't realize that molding yourself to every one else's expectations eventually makes them nobody, while Being yourself and pursuing your passions makes them somebody. I think if you keep writing these amazing poems you will be somebody someday!!!!!!!
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PrincessMiku16 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Your poems are the best! I just happened to be lucky enough to stumble upon it!
:D You write the truth! I love it!
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TheMadTrumpeter Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree on this one.
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Blackehpo13 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
I actually really liked this, it tottaly explained how society kinda works. Keep on writing!! You're great!!!
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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ElleDays Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
another person already written about this before you did owo

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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Uhm... that's me XD
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ElleDays Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
kay forget the comment:')
You ''updated'' the poem! :')

Ohmy i'm sorry xD well I like the one you wrote before this one c:
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol that's fine :)
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ElleDays Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
I'm really sorry!
I love your poem serously!
Nowadays all what people care about is 'the outside'

sorry if my english is bad;3;
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