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You're anorexic if you're thin
You're not? Then you're obese.

If you're different, you're insane
You're not? Then you're a fake.

If you're happy, you're hiding something.
You're not? You must be emo.

If you're dating, you're a slut.
You're not? You must have no friends.

If you're popular, you're a jerk.
You're not? You're a nobody.

If you're quiet, you must be disabled.
You're not? You obnoxious freak.

If you're you, you're wrong.
You're not?
Then you must be perfect.
Boom.
Just something i wrote quickly, hope is pleases y'all :)
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This poem is slightly different than the others - no, I'm not referring ot the lack of rhymes people usually define "poem" with. It defines not a lost love nor a need for a new one, but the issues the author has (let's face it, everyone has) with common society. People often judge you no matter what you do or who you are and you cannot get away from this behaviour.

The contrast here is indeed, fellow readers, hard to grasp at first. It is not because of bad portrayal or lack of technique but the sheer rarity of this particular technique.

I know usually you're supposed to show a negative point, but personally I can't think of any off the top of my head. I was truly blown away!
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Critique by alexaxbeat Feb 21, 2013, 4:38:24 PM
I have to say, this was extremely true, and brilliantly written!
The poem relates to many people, and is very serious. It isn't the MOST original poem, and there are several like it, but the wonderful thing is, they are constantly written because they are beautiful! Though, it has it's own special essence that gives it it's originality. My only complaint would be that, it doesn't have a REAL ending to tie it up. if it didn't just stop supplying words, it would be able to continue as it is. I believe it should have one last phrase, or word to indicate it has ended. Besides that, I thought this poem was very inspirational.
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russell664 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2015  New member
Wow, really like this. Very different.
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Gladddragon Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
It speaks to you then it's a poem...this one says to me you can't fucking win..no matter what you do..amen.
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shadazefan54563534 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
wow...that's deep.
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jasper-lamarai Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
how very true. 
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RogersTheBull Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazing. Contrary to what alexasbeat says, I think the last paragraph ends it perfectly (is that the wrong thing to say? ;p). It's the saddest line.
Also, have you read any Alexander McCall Smith. I think in one of his books (perhaps several) he mentions something about the beautiful being that which is perfectly at home in the space it occupies, as are all animals, but not so many humans.
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JayCookie1997 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist

RIGHT IN THE FEELS.

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Thief-in-darkness Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Student Writer
this is so true
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VoadorChama Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Certainly speaks out against stereotypes. You did a good job writing this.
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TaeYoongJoongSa Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
but yeah people are judgemental
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:icontaeyoongjoongsa:
TaeYoongJoongSa Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Is this how you look at everything? Or is this just to say people are wrong sometimes?
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Student Writer
The truth and very well written good job :)
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
The people are like the Sith Lords. They only consider extremes.
And they can think what they want about me. I'll just say "meh" and walk away.
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glitterygrace13 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
amen to this
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Unisis-2-in-1-beauty Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student General Artist
O-O
So true.
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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Tanzani Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Shows how we just can't win :no:
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lw8453 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013
So much truth.
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Forcedlactationlover Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is well done, with a feel for both language and psychology. My only objection, and it's actually a minor one, is that as do many arguments (if it is one), it excludes non-extreme possibilities. Seen as a poetic piece, it simply works, partly by mocking the extremes used in much labeling. I like it.
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TheScalene Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This really hits deep.
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Twisted-Curiosity Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student
What's odd, is that this how people actually judge. i love the poem, it needed to be said.
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Winter-Fallspring Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i agree
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5pluto Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You just can't win, can you?
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whoahmy Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
WOW! NICE!! :D
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blackstars7 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
reminds me of the song by kelly clarkson - you can't win
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NinaGrace Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I love this!
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WinniUsagi Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013
This is perfect.
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Vallume Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can relate to this a lot... Love the poem by the way :meow:
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webkinzagirl Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
This poem reminds me of "You Can't Win" by Kelley Clarkson. This is really nice and I think you did a good job!
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Teh-Rie Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
Another one that happens on dA

You like yaoi/yuri: you're an obnoxious pervert
You dislike yaoi/yuri: you're a homophobe
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miss-monomi Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I must be a homophobe, then. OTL
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Teh-Rie Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
No, just listing some other generalization that would fit with the above.
I know it isn't true
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:iconmisspinks:
MissPinks Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
ive never heard anyone imply half of these things.

"we see the world not as it is but as we are"... >>
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hotsexywoman Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
hot and sexy woman show a part see amaznig
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Hakudoushii Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Uh..
Are these things supposed to be negative?
Half of them have applied to me since childhood. :l
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alexyorim Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'd rather be different than to blend in and lose myself.
I'd rather be doing weird stuff than doing the same shit over and over again.
I'd rather be fat than be cold, fragile and skinny.
I'd rather be a nobody who gives than a somebody who is an ass.
I'd rather have mixed emotion than frown when happy and smile when sad.
I'd rather be alone than have friends who mistreat you and fucking you up.
I'd rather be perfectly wrong, than wrongly perfect.

And I'd rather read this poem than listening to crappy songs that talks nonsense crap.
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MissJagermeister Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
i think that your 'fat-skinny' sentence is unfair. i can't understand why a skinny person should be cold and fragile.
i'm skinny, i eat a lot, i don't like being so skinny but i am. i'm sorry if people get teased because they're fat, but it doesn't mean that every skinny person is a cold heartless person who cares only for his/her weight.
i know a lot of cold, fragile fat people. so stop putting 'cold' and 'skinny' in the same sentence, please. i think the first 2 verses of this poem explain it all.
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MissPinks Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
im not even anywhere near skinny but that always bothers me too when people say shit like that.
all i think is "wow you must be really fat and spiteful". what an ugly personality.
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alexyorim Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sorry about that... I'll be sensitive nest time...
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EarthlyNugget Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Agreed.:)
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mmikael Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this ♥
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TheBattyCrow Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's almost funny how certain people can be misconstrued like that^^
brilliantly written, and excellent ending. Ties in very well.
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GoldenDogGodess Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Filmographer
Very well written poem! :)
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bjman664 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
pretty good dude... and SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO true in today's world
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MiriMaxwell Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
¡Perfectos! <3
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JoshuaxMangaIX Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Artist
nothing will ever be as simple as black and white
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alexyorim Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
or brown and beige... 'coz reality is brown and beige..
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AlexisAshnew Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
Really nice, I like it ^^
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MikkiMarie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)
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Neo-Raven Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist
Wow. This is a good piece. Well done!
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